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What Yall hate'n-fo [freestyle]
Posted: Tue Feb 26, 2008 9:11 am
by thaphantom
Why yall hat'n-fo, really i'm just state'n-ho, I'm like satan-though, I bring delivery so evil i'm just say'n-yo. You really ain't got no place-to-go, You're trapped in the corner you-rat, I let them tools-clap, i spray-the-fo'
fifth, Leave you on the flo-stiff, More like you're worthless,observe-this,Get rid of ya fam' Leave you joe-dirt'n. Ya flow's is hurtin, Why you wanna hate? Ain't none of this worth-it,don't step to the plate, Wanna Man up and take' this ass whoopin' yall haters got comin', No point in runnin',The bullets propell at ya i'm dumpin'. Simple flow,So sick, Get em Yo, Wrist Slit? Slit-ya-wrist, Don't come at me get in the line, be back-to-back, with bitch-tuh-bitch, I've Strapped-the-rap, Ready to blow with 1 tap. What yall hate'n-fo?
Really bored...Love some feed though
Posted: Tue Feb 26, 2008 9:37 am
by WILDBILLISAGUIDOFAGGIT
LOL...Structure wish too paragraph type here...Now since you were bored this was okay..You had some okay concepts that, needed better wording and bar positioning...Like you could have had a satan flip but you mentioned his name too far into the line...But it's ok for a freestyle man, multis/flow was solid by the way.
Posted: Tue Feb 26, 2008 9:45 am
by Haz
Somethin Like dood Up Dere sed^
Your Structure Wus Sloppy .. To Much like a Paragraph...
your Multis were good.. you just gotta Learn to get you ideas Out betta..
this Wus aiite.. Keep droppin Dough
Posted: Tue Feb 26, 2008 9:52 am
by thaphantom
wasnt going for sctructure...i just spit some stupid shit off the head..i recorded it then wrote down what i recorded
Posted: Tue Feb 26, 2008 2:22 pm
by Ambiguous Realm
hm.. could be better.. obviously haha, but alot of it didn't seem like u.. little forced.. but watever u know.. its a freestyle(so u say) so keep droppin em
Posted: Tue Feb 26, 2008 4:48 pm
by Brah-Vo
Was iight.
Coulda been better.
I udnerstand ur structure coz it was a keystyle.
But yeh nothing special.
Keep Up .
Posted: Tue Feb 26, 2008 6:05 pm
by Omega Bill
Understand where the structure was coming from, it's hard to structure a freestyle cause most are done to a beat and you can't really structure a freestyle flow.
Multis were good. Concepts were good.
Elevating is key and you're doing it. Keep droppin, you can only get better.
Posted: Wed Feb 27, 2008 4:58 am
by ~Symbolikull~
showed some decent use of multies here man, you still could of structured it better freestyle or not, ull get better reaction and better feed witta better structure man. not bad but like everyone else said it could of been better all around. "simple flow" it was kinda simple in most parts
Posted: Wed Feb 27, 2008 8:55 pm
by Viral
all i really noticed was the multis...as in..u actually used em....n they actually worked....otherwise...structure doesnt really matter to me....the flow was aiiight...coulda been better.....keep droppin tho...can only get better
Posted: Thu Feb 28, 2008 1:45 am
by thaphantom
Just wondering how was the flow forced? I don't see how a freestyle can be forced?
Posted: Thu Feb 28, 2008 7:24 am
by Arvincible
^^when you try to hard to make something rhyme and make sense at the same time...
Posted: Thu Feb 28, 2008 8:54 am
by thaphantom
Oh i wasn't tryin to force nothin' I was just messin around....But thanks for the feed yo...uppin for more[not hatin on yall feeds]
WEAK
Posted: Thu Feb 28, 2008 11:03 am
by BlueBaby
I kno i dont have room to talk but both yall came WEAK <
Posted: Thu Feb 28, 2008 3:53 pm
by ~Symbolikull~
both of yall...?
Posted: Thu Feb 28, 2008 11:04 pm
by thaphantom
Both of yall wtf you talkin' bout?