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The Breaking Ground
Posted: Mon Feb 18, 2008 9:21 pm
by Khan
This Is Something I Just Wrote, Felt Like Putting Myself Out There.
It's Not Much But Here It Is.
Look Dude I'm Not Scared Of Your Hollow-Pointz//
I'll Destory Your Thoughts, and Call Your Brains A Hollow-Joint//
I'm Not A Rapper Or A Thug, I'm Lyricist//
Your An Artist But Your Premier-Is-Missed//
I'm Your Darkest Secret Cause What You Fear-Is-This//
This Is My Opening To All-Who-Read//
I Know You're All Bitches Cause Your Balls-Do-Bleed//
Leakin Through Your Whitey-Tightys For-All-To-See//
Your Butthurt, I Know It's Kinda Hard-To-Believe//
Your All Actin Like Song Writers, Like Your Rhymes-Can-Be-Purchased//
When Really The Fact Is That All Your Lines-Are-Worthless//
My Mind-Makes-You-Nervous, And You Have Only Scratched-The-Surface//
Flawless Is Prefect, If Your Scared Of This Text, Then You Don't Wanna See Me In Person.
Bad Or Good FeedBack, I'll Take Both
Posted: Mon Feb 18, 2008 9:26 pm
by Arvincible
Your All Actin Like Song Writers, Like Your Rhymes-Can-Be-Purchased//
When Really The Fact Is That All Your Lines-Are-Worthless//
that was ur best line lol ^^^
good shit and welcome to the site, stay active cuz we need more of this stuff in illest. You had a decent flow goin on there, you can get a lot of tips here to improve your style. You got potential.
If you feel like battling, you should try to take a shot at me, im pretty new to this shit myself.
Just tell me you accept here or deny, n ill set it up.
Posted: Mon Feb 18, 2008 9:30 pm
by Khan
Well I'm not new to this site, just been on and off, just use to do Collabs. with Complex(Tom)
And about that battle wait till later today so we can start on a fresh 24 hours
cause right now im pretty tired..lol
Posted: Mon Feb 18, 2008 9:31 pm
by Khan
oh and thanks for the feedback..lol my bad
Posted: Mon Feb 18, 2008 9:33 pm
by Arvincible
on and off? well i see ur profile and u joined 5 days ago lol idk man that's not that far back.
Oh im not tryna battle right now, but do u accept?
Posted: Mon Feb 18, 2008 9:36 pm
by thaphantom
lol...khan isn't new to the site...just kinda went away you can say he was in a tiny room? Lol but good shit homie
Posted: Mon Feb 18, 2008 9:37 pm
by Khan
Yes i do accept and this is a new profile i go by Khan-Verse.
So I've known some of these dudes for years, Emoks, Complex.
so, but yeah
Posted: Mon Feb 18, 2008 9:39 pm
by Arvincible
alright for sure ill set it up, just check and your verse'll be due when? 48 hours good?
Im trying my best to keep this site alive right now lol
Posted: Mon Feb 18, 2008 9:40 pm
by Khan
yeah thats straight, and i understand what you mean.
You should have my verse later today.
Posted: Mon Feb 18, 2008 9:44 pm
by Arvincible
for sure, just check in then lol its set up buddy
Posted: Tue Feb 19, 2008 5:26 pm
by Ambiguous Realm
alot better then wat i remembered, couple multis little off by a syllable or so.. seemed like a freestyle to me tho lol dunno.. wasn't a bad read, definitely containing the elements, just gotta put it into action lol
Posted: Wed Feb 20, 2008 4:38 am
by -TraMaTiK-
EkomS wrote:alot better then wat i remembered, couple multis little off by a syllable or so.. seemed like a freestyle to me tho lol dunno.. wasn't a bad read, definitely containing the elements, just gotta put it into action lol
he basically said what i was gonna put^..newayz,havent seen u around but welcome 2 the site since i havent seen ya n hope 2 see u keep droppin,the flow iz good only thing id suggest iz work on ur vocab and ull get pretty sick over time
Posted: Wed Feb 20, 2008 4:45 am
by ~Symbolikull~
thought this was pretty straight for the first drop here, obviously notta rookie to the shit you got some mad potential jus stay active and keep droppin
Posted: Wed Feb 20, 2008 7:20 am
by thaphantom
pretty nice drop