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Keep ya eyes peeled for part 2 coming soon. An if didn't realize I'm the part of the narrator or some could perceive it as the guardian angel and TGYH is portraying the character.

Part 2's gonna have some twists and turns.

i cant really say i relate or that i see anything like this happen, but this was really good. i liked the whole idea of the narrator and then the main character telling the story. i liked TGYH's verses more but probably because he was talking from the main character. TGYH there were many quotables there, but i wont copy and paste them all coz there'd be too many, good job though i especially liked the last few bars.

A lot of kids dont know when to grow up, thinking hustling is the only way to survive
These kids are only 16 years old out on the corners and by time their 18 only half are alive
This kid doesn't listen to his mom, neither does his brother, but his bro is always rollin cash
And everytime the big man leaves and accidently leave his drawer open Brian gets a peak at the stash
He wants to be just like his brother, whats the harm, its just a little dope and some chrome in his pants
So Brian decides he gonna start pushing that weight posted up in the street like bro in his gangsta stance

Brian doesnt quite understand this whole game yet and doesnt realize he can get his head split
His bro cant watch out for him all the time, so hes on the streets after school alone all day
And sometimes he even brings his rocks to school and now he'll sell em at home or in the hallway
Well Brians first life lesson is going to come up here quick, because like I said these cat aint scared to pull it
Lets see how well Brian adapts to the changes in his life, because not even his brother can run from a bullet

parts i liked from bill^^^pretty good shit

Moms is Always Gone Sometimes i Dont Eat Fa Weeks
i Gotta Ambition Fa Money So i Gotta Feed Tha Beast
Always See My Blood On Tha Corner Pitchin Tha Rock
Sometimes i Worry Fa Ma Brotha But We Live in This Spot
i Need Some New Kicks His Pockets Always On Swole
i'm Steady Headed My Mind is Set Always On Goals
These Cats On Tha Block They Always Gettin Shot At
i Wonder if i Should Let 'Em Know Where My Spot At
This is My Story i'm Happy Cuz i Sold My First Rock Today
This is Livin Yo i'll Never Turn My Back Or Push My Block Away

My Brotha Made A Monster i Was Jus Lookin Ta Get My Name Out
We Been Runnin Tha Game And Tha Streets Are Gettin Heated
i'm Already Waist Deep With Tha Drama i Just Put My Feet in
A Few Weeks Later i'd Learn A Man Was Shot
i Didnt Care But i'd Be Sure Ta Damn Tha Block
Tha News Said He Was 18 Damn Who Could it Be
My Fuckin Brother Dawg They Thought They Was Shootin At Me
Get A Call From Moms She On Tha Phone Cryin
"Ya Kno Drugs Are Tha Reason Rome is Dyin"

nice^^^..yea i hightlighted mosta yall verses lol but i liked those parts alot..good shit u guys..and ayee..bill if u down for it son i wanna jump in part 2 with u n jj if u want,if not thats str8 but i liked this shit it wuz smooth,stay@it


and aye if u cud leave some feed on the 'gettin over it' collab in the chamber..i kno jj did so if u cud bill id apperciate it

Tha News Said He Was 18 Damn Who Could it Be
My Fuckin Brother Dawg They Thought They Was Shootin At Me <- Wut happen 2 big L.


i Need Some New Kicks His Pockets Always On Swole
i'm Steady Headed My Mind is Set Always On Goals
These Cats On Tha Block They Always Gettin Shot At
i Wonder if i Should Let 'Em Know Where My Spot At
This is My Story i'm Happy Cuz i Sold My First Rock Today
This is Livin Yo i'll Never Turn My Back Or Push My Block Away <-- nice


His bro cant watch out for him all the time, so hes on the streets after school alone all day
And sometimes he even brings his rocks to school and now he'll sell em at home or in the hallway
Well Brians first life lesson is going to come up here quick, because like I said these cat aint scared to pull it
Lets see how well Brian adapts to the changes in his life, because not even his brother can run from a bullet

^ Liked dis Part da Most frm Bills shit..

it was dope it reminded me of some shit i posted back then,i can relate too some parts
but the story scheme was hot ya both killed it keep it up.

I really liked the whole concept of this. You guys both did a really good job. I'm not going to quote anything because there really is a lot worth quoting, and tramatik took care of enough of it. But good job guys keep doin ya thing.

whoa man tha concept was sick wit it yo,

a narrator/omniscient angel

and

the main character

this is tight, both yall fit your roles great, bill's style fits well with narrating, but i swear my dude the hyperextendin doesnt help you. Thats ya downside and always has been. You got the end rhyme down but you got no inner rhymes.
TGYH, you had that role down, you had great visuals of the person's character. If ya'll need help for the next one hit me up!

But anyways. overall its a great way to get a story poppin. Im lookin forward to the next one kids.

Thanks for all the feed. We'd let you hop on but Tramatik is already playing the other role, which we can't give away. 2 more drops after this one peeps.

Definetley gonna drop the next one not far from now due to all the positive feed. Good looking out guys.

Now u 2 Niggaz Needa Leave Feed On

Haz Vs Cee

Damn dudes. Props.
Everything here was nice,
The topic was awesome.
Bill really stepped up here.
And TGYH bring alot to the table as usual.

Fave bars:

Sometimes i Worry Fa Ma Brotha But We Live in This Spot
i Need Some New Kicks His Pockets Always On Swole
i'm Steady Headed My Mind is Set Always On Goals
These Cats On Tha Block They Always Gettin Shot At
i Wonder if i Should Let 'Em Know Where My Spot At

Sometimes i'm Confused i Dont Kno if i Should Keep On Hustlin
Will i See Tomorrow if i Peep Tha Streets And Put This Muscle in?

^^^ Dope from TGYH



Lets take a closer look, now hes selling crack, he doesnt realize hes gonna get lit
Doesnt realize yet that crackheads dont fuck around an the bigger the rock the bigger the hit
And Im not talking about smoking it through your crack pipe or rolling a spliff
Brian doesnt quite understand this whole game yet and doesnt realize he can get his head split

^^^Bill.

sorta busy at da moment....i liked the story it had....bill...ur verses..to me...lacked ne real rhyme scheme...maybe its jst me...i like da way it was put together tho...tgyh u had some pretty decent multis...i like how its 2 sides of da story n wat not...ones a narration n ones da person directly...keep droppin yall

i didn't really have the time to read this, kinda busy, so yeah I'll just take into mind that everyone else said it was good, so fuck it, the shit was nice..lol