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I can tell that your angry, by the puffs and the moans/
How many signs must i give until you leave me alone//

You got me bundled up smothered shut, when do i breathe?/
Its almost like your insults, put my mind at ease//

How long will you poor till i got a half cup/
As much as you cut me down, its only time till im up//

Standing on your high horse but im sporting stilts/
while you were planting brain ninja's i was layin the guilts//

Not done at all... just wanted some feed, so i can find where im going with this...

Agreed

this was pretty basic, even though the topic was pretty good, and you executed it alright.

way to short, good that's its not done though.

I can tell that your angry, by the puffs and the moans/
How many signs must i give until you leave me alone//

Alright, Got your msg across straight away, basic.

You got me bundled up smothered shut, when do i breathe?/
Its almost like your insults, put my mind at ease//

lol pretty nice, rhymeschme here is simple but i sore were you were going

How long will you poor till i got a half cup/
As much as you cut me down, its only time till im up//

didnt like this much

Standing on your high horse but im sporting stilts/
while you were planting brain ninja's i was layin the guilts//

ok finish .

overall this was alright abit basic uppin