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Shooting The Air.

Posted: Sun Nov 18, 2007 3:26 pm
by Brah-Vo
My biggest enemy is me, thats-`a-`fact
im fuckin crazy for pussy, like cats-`on-`crack .//.
packed-`a-`mac,for self defense went out-`the-`door
on my left i see a homie shout-`at his-`whore .//.
on my right i see a homie slangin-`some-`drugs
deal goes wrong, gun goes bang-`bang on some-`thugs .//.
i look behind me,my mommas stuck-`lyin down in-`bed
paralyzed coz a nigga struck-`her in the-`head .//.
left her for dead, i find the cocksucka ill kill-`him
but, i'll stoop down to his level coz its my father im killin .//.
these emotions that im feelin i curse my conshence*
i gotta forget this shit, i foolishly say its all nonsense .//.
was it not for God's mercy, id probably-`be-`dead
I just lost my friend the other day, before he died he said .//.
Watch, Watch closely coz hes followin you-`around
like a blood hound, he's hungry, your the food-`hes-`found .//.
I feel the cold breath of death run down-`my-`neck
i see my own death, the loud sound-`of-`techs .//.
I shout "faggot i aint dead yet!"
As i turned around and gave death a fresh serving of lead .//.
There was no one there, shot a full clip-`in the-`air
i was so scared, stood still, did nothing but stare .//.
I hear a car drive next to me, the window rolls down
a person asks me for directions "We're from out of town" .//.
Then i wake up, in a hospital-`bed
i hear a faint rattle-`on the side my-`head .//.
The Doctor said "Your lucky to be alive you barely survived
you got shot last nite five times by 5 guys" .//.
The Doctor left, rattle still in my head
lying still on the hospital-`bed .//.


Then my heart stopped.


I was dead.

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*spelling lol.

Posted: Sun Nov 18, 2007 6:25 pm
by Brah-Vo
UpPPInGGxgxG

Posted: Mon Nov 19, 2007 3:02 pm
by Brah-Vo
Thanks for the feed tgyh. UPPING

Posted: Wed Nov 21, 2007 4:56 pm
by Brah-Vo
UPPING

Posted: Wed Nov 21, 2007 5:09 pm
by Viral
for being an End Rhyme verse...its pretty straight....keep it up...ive noticed that u started writing wit more multis...try using em thru out the whole verse instead of jst at the end of ur lines....jst a tip

Posted: Wed Nov 21, 2007 5:39 pm
by Brah-Vo
thanks for the feed viral. much appreciated.

Posted: Mon Nov 26, 2007 8:19 am
by Brah-Vo
Gracias for the feed my dude. Uppin..

Posted: Mon Nov 26, 2007 8:58 am
by кℓαѕѕιιcк
haha Wazzzup Motha F____kerz Im Back... Making it big haha btw Raiza That Wuz Nice Laterz

Posted: Mon Nov 26, 2007 8:59 am
by кℓαѕѕιιcк
haha Wazzzup Motha F____kerz Im Back... Making it big haha btw Raiza That Wuz Nice Laterz