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The follow up series to "Where I Stand"

I am amazing lyrically
i get every emcee to praise my ability
since the days of bibilically
speaking to the raise of the deacons
I'm what heathens literally believe in
before physically leaving with satan
escape the creation, modernized tenacious
bastards, facists masters
who try to take us backwards
similiar to racist actors
erase the adverse factors, I'm great
compared to bad verse rappers, I hate
to smash herbs, who create
disasters, so we contemplate
at words, demonstrate thru conversation
it's time we calm the nation
cuz the bomb is waiting
for america the biggest "abomination"
since hilter, "no" remember the holocaust
better yet all the loss
now we got mosques, that's faith in the open
praising Iran, creating the omen
plans to take israel and all of its land
to follow the plan of muhammad
its funny, we can't touch on it
take the quran and the blow the dust off it
I'm not saying he is an unjust prophet
it's not just profit, it's a prediction
christian, muslim, both seeking nuclear enrichment
me and you are not rich since
we have a god "controlling" our existence
incidents of civilians with a million
blowing themselves up, for real, it's children
killing, innocence, is revealed, it's chillin
makes me want to grab the steele n start healing
mansions or religion, it's hidden
cuz we all want it all deep within
it's written inside the scriptures
the walls of prisons, great literature
we are all victims, cuz believe in self
and needing health, come after greed n wealth

ok complexity i seriously have mixed fellings and thoughts on this drop, i just think you rush your work, and you do not use your lyrical skills! to the best you can .. for example.

I am amazing lyrically
i get every emcee to praise my ability

^ like come on man?
i know there was a follow up but i gotta say that bar was weak..

your vocab was dope, flow was not a problem.. besides a couple of bars this drop was pretty good concept wise, lyrically it was straight because of the vocab and your small amount of multis sorta helped out..

anyway dude, this is just my view at it .. im looking foward to your next drop. 7.5/10

Thanks for the realistic feedback.

i agree with sequence a bit,i dont agree with the fact u 'rush ur work' tho even if u do it dont seem like it,i have seen u do better thats tru but this wasnt bad,i wuz feelin the first half it was nice but it just seemd 2 escalate 4 the better with this part below

now we got mosques, that's faith in the open
praising Iran, creating the omen
plans to take israel and all of its land
to follow the plan of muhammad
its funny, we can't touch on it
take the quran and the blow the dust off it
I'm not saying he is an unjust prophet
it's not just profit, it's a prediction
christian, muslim, both seeking nuclear enrichment
me and you are not rich since
we have a god "controlling" our existence
incidents of civilians with a million
blowing themselves up, for real, it's children
killing, innocence, is revealed, it's chillin
makes me want to grab the steele n start healing
mansions or religion, it's hidden
cuz we all want it all deep within
it's written inside the scriptures
the walls of prisons, great literature
we are all victims, cuz believe in self
and needing health, come after greed n wealth

real nice man^ keep it up i wanna see #2

this was ok. for most people id say this was a dope verse but ive seen this type of verse from you a few times now. i wouldnt say it was rushed though. i liked the structure with the short lines.

I am amazing lyrically
i get every emcee to praise my ability
since the days of bibilically
speaking to the raise of the deacons
I'm what heathens literally believe in
before physically leaving with satan
escape the creation, modernized tenacious
bastards, facists masters
who try to take us backwards
similiar to racist actors
erase the adverse factors, I'm great
compared to bad verse rappers, I hate
to smash herbs, who create
disasters, so we contemplate
at words, demonstrate thru conversation
it's time we calm the nation
cuz the bomb is waiting
for america the biggest "abomination"

AND

it's not just profit, it's a prediction
christian, muslim, both seeking nuclear enrichment
me and you are not rich since
we have a god "controlling" our existence
incidents of civilians with a million
blowing themselves up, for real, it's children
killing, innocence, is revealed, it's chillin

^^ FAV PARTS

couple iffy spots here n there i mean whole thing was dope
but it was fire in some spots good in others if ya feel me

nice drop lots of info 1

i think i should have read this before i jumped ahead and read the second part of it. but i think this is better than the second one. i hate it when people give their views on religion and know nothing about it, and jus raddle on, but im sure you know what your talking about, and thats why it is actually interesting to read. when people just go on about nothing no one wants to read it. so yea, keep it up