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what happened, rappers went soft used ta be harder then fifty's- jaw
breakin the cities- laws now diddy- calls the shots after biggie- falls?
what happened ta wisdom- yall only time thers passion in the game is when the pistons- brawl
.... this is an uprising of a spirit -kid heart and soul spittin by a lyr-icist
if what you hear -is- sick put ya hands tagether stand up and cheer- the- shit
I HAVE MASTERED -ALL this is my movie all you bastards -fall, "feel me"
a star, movin through you talentless actors like "ill be in touch" at a casting-call
after -all my chain could anchor-shores spittin my shit burns lips like canker-sores
i thank -the -lord for serenity and givin me my own sense of identity mentally
and extensively the physical ability to make my scriptures ring for centuries
evidently giving me the potential to never feel the sting of penitentiaries
how you gonna attack -the -crown you aint smilin at me cuz i jus smacked- ya- frown
youll know the meanin of backin -down defeated with thought "deeper" than hatchbacks-wit-clowns

Technically, This Drop Was Excellent.

i Was Really Feeling The Structure, u Opened Up With an interest-Catching Bar That Stood Out And Continued The Flow And Rhymescheme Solidly The Whole Way Through.

Liked The Overdose Of inner Rhymes in The Second Half as Well, i Like To Throw a Load Of Rhymes in My Last Parts Too.

Could've Been Longer And The Topic Wasn't That Exciting But u Pulled it Off Pretty Nicely.

Favourite Bar Would Have To Be The 1st One, Overall The Rhymescheme And Structure Was ill Though.

thx domino appreciate the feed

uppin

i liked it.. the ending could've been better tho, but everything else was solid.. even the use of vocabs u threw it in to rhyme... i could easily read it with flow

as far as i've seen personally it's probably one of ur better drops

this was decent man,cant hate..liked the first like,4 bars or so alot,good shit..the rest i felt like u were comin hard but not as hard as the begining,still enjoyed it and didnt find anything really 'wrong' or somethin u shud change..keep em comin

This was dope bro i loved the two opening lines, Vocab and flow were on.



Solid 8.5/10

Yeah, def a solid drop.. love it when people are able to flip a played out topic to something creative and dope..

Buuut what the fuck rhino, i'm seein some structure.. lol.. u got tired of listening to me? finally! haha.. didn't think u'd last that long.. lol

anyway.. i loved your opener.. just one think i noticed

.... this is an uprising of a spirit -kid heart and soul spittin by a lyr-icist
if what you hear -is- sick put ya hands tagether stand up and cheer- the- shit

how bout u exchange cheer-the-shit, with cheer-ish-this.. just a thought..


other then that, very solid!