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yea i kno the structure is werid but it goes 2 the beat nicely,so heres a verse i made recently

inside a me theres a tyrant unfoldin
ready 2 explode with violence im holdin
but nobody told me silence iz golden
but i gotta,break the chains
from the fakes who remain
tryna act like snakes n make me insane
but i cant handle,all the hurt n pain
cuz the work n strain
might make me blow my brains
like Kurt Cobain
if u hear me
im talkin 2 the man
on the cross
got me on my knees
sayin 'man im lost'
can u tell me if
im masterin this craft right
despite those who act like
im tryna rap tight
baptize me in the truth
so i forget my past life
screamin with sorrow
thats heard from the sky
askin god 'do u hear
the words that i cry?'

... Even Though People aren`t Use to This Type Of Structure ..
Tha Flow Was ill ..
it Was Very Smooth ..
& Tha Multies Stepped Up to ..
Pretty Good Piece IMO ..
i Love Weird Styles Like This .. Lol

loll thankz rell..uppin pplz

like it short to the point structure kinda throws me a little probably have to hear the beat

but i cant handle,all the hurt n pain
cuz the work n strain
might make me blow my brains
like Kurt Cobain

^^liked it but couldnt catch the flow


overall nice work homie enjoy readin ya

yea u'd prolly have 2 hear me say it or hear the beat 2 catch the flow..but thanks rhino