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Just a Quick Piece, i Haven't Wrote in a Few Weeks. Possibly a Part 2 Coming Soon i Donno But Yeah it is What it is Lol.

it's Like i Stepped Out My Body,
Then im Falling Behind.
Sometimes All i Know About Me is What Others-See ..||
Like Everyday i Leave And Step into Another-Me ..||
Confused Yeah, But Still im Gnna Claim To Know-it-All ..||
And i Try To Figure it Out Then My Focus-Falls ..||
i Look in The Mirror, it's Like a Stranger, i Don't Know What-He'll-Say ..||
One Day it's Fine, But Sometimes it's Hate And i Wnna Sock-His-Face ..||
im Sure u Know About Me, Always Talking Shit, Laughing And So-On ..||
it's The Same in The Real World, But inside im Like 'The Show Must Go-On' ..||
And What These Fuckers Don't Know, is it's Hard Smile-Sometimes ..||
Sometimes it's Just a Show, Cuz No Matter What im Never The Silent-Type ..||
Laughter Ain't a Cure it's a Distraction, And When it Ends u Feel-Worse ..||
Cuz Behind All The Giggles, Smiles And Sunshine There's Still-Hurt ..||
Last Year Sucked, But if it Never Happened id Be Lost-Today ..||
No Regrets, i Just Kept a Level Head And Then Sought-a-Way ..||
Too Much Deaths, Too Much Kicks To The Head, And i Was Still Laughing ..||
Probably Joked About it Too, And Never Mentioned it Rapping ..||
To Quote "inside My Heart is Breaking, My Makeup May Be Flaking, ..||
.. But My Smile Still Stays On.." is Accurate To Describe My Only Time 'Faking' ..||
i Couldn't Sleep, i Lost a Lot Of Weight, And Took a Taste-For-Booze ..||
But i Knew Behind All These Distractions, i Couldn't Escape-The-Truth ..||

even though you didnt give feed on my last 2 nice emo drop lol

i Couldn't Sleep, i Lost a Lot Of Weight, And Took a Taste-For-Booze ..||
But i Knew Behind All These Distractions, i Couldn't Escape-The-Truth ..||
^^ fav bar

the rest was good little unnatural i felt
stayed on topic n got the point out nice drop

i Look in The Mirror, it's Like a Stranger, i Don't Know What-He'll-Say ..||
One Day it's Fine, But Sometimes it's Hate And i Wnna Sock-His-Face ..||

not my fav bar,but that was hot^..liked this over all tre,flow was good all the way thru,multis were there,some of em obviously wont make perfect sense cuz of the accent but that doesnt stop the emotion or nothin behind this piece..buttttt overall tre this was good,hope u do,do a 2nd part 2 it id liked 2 see it..liked the closing bar as well..keep it up..uNo

RIGHT LOL, Don't Worry, Since u Gentlemen Left Feed i Shall Return The Favour.

The emotion on this was cool. I like it when you're a little more secure with yourself. It makes you
come off as more confident. Instead of this robot like creature with no personality.

So this was really dope for that. Like another piece I went back and read from you.

To Quote "inside My Heart is Breaking, My Makeup May Be Flaking, ..||
.. But My Smile Still Stays On.." is Accurate To Describe My Only Time 'Faking' ..||

I like the wordplay on that. Taking advantage of all that wordplay talent in a form
that isn't talking about masturbation.

8.5/10

Good drop. Multis were on point as well.

Anyway. You suck extremely bad at feedback. I doubt you will leave either of them any.

You know reading other peoples drops just might help you become a writer. It's just a thought.