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Eyes Show Rell Tha Reel Of Mah Life, & Start Leakin` Through Tha Bars ..//..
a Dude Wit a Ski Mask Puts Tha Fifth Behind Me, & Says Reach For Tha Stars ..//..
Puffin` & Weezin`, & Mah Breathin` is So Hard ....
Tha Chrome Presses against Mah Head, Sends ice Cubes Out Mah Eye Lids ..//..
Thinkin` to Mahself, i`m Sorry For Wat i Did, Please Lemme Live For Mah Kid ..//..
Stressin` Soon, i Feel Like i`m in a Dressin` Room `cus i`m Goin` Through Mah Fits ..//..
Lord Please Don`t Let Mah Die Like This, He Smacks Wit Tha Pistol ..//..
He`s Finna Body Me, i Know He is, Without Tha "Mats & Officials" ..//..
inside Mah Head i`m Tellin` all Mah Cats i`ll Miss U .......
i Drop to Mah Knees, Like i Was On a Hoe Route,
This isn`t a Way i Wanna Go Out ......
Wit No Doubt ... in Mah Mind ... This Guy is Gonna Pull Some & Then Blast ..
He Aimed For Head, i`m Claimin` i`m Head ......
He Put Mah "Smarts to Tha Forward" Like Tha "Wise Kids in Tha Front Of Tha Class" ..//..
i Feel Like Mah Spirt is Tryna Move Me again ....
Demons Wanna Come Get Mah Soul, But Tha Angel Soothes Me again ....
Mah Body Reflects For Tha Last Time, He Thinks i`m Still alive ......
So He Shoots Me ..... again ..//..


This is Sumptin` Different For Me ..
Lol .. i Was Highly inspired By Plex & Tram`s Collabo ..

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Thinkin` to Mahself, i`m Sorry For Wat i Did, Please Lemme Live For Mah Kid ..//..
Stressin` Soon, i Feel Like i`m in a Dressin` Room `cus i`m Goin` Through Mah Fits ..//..

one of my fab bars from this..^^

liked ur lil story here u got lol..its cool..good imagery rell and good emotion i felt it..liked ur perspective and how u portrayed the story..good shit rell

This was nice. Good story and i liked the abrupt ending

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Tha Chrome Presses against Mah Head, Sends ice Cubes Out Mah Eye Lids ..//..
Thinkin` to Mahself, i`m Sorry For Wat i Did, Please Lemme Live For Mah Kid ..//..

Only small negative point would be your use of mah. Its not a big thing but it seemed kinda repetitive. Its just somethin that i noticed when i was readin it. There was a couple of times i thought it woulda sounded better if you just put my instead of mah.

Word. Nice sequel/different perspective man.

GoodLookin` Out On Tha FB Everybody ..

Sorry for the weak feedback, but I'm trying to contribute as much as I can while I'm online.