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don't we show our granparents respect cause they're older and smarter?
it's makin me ashamed thinkin of how we're growing colder and harder
they defended our nation from the invasion of the nazi ideology
when all hope was shattered they proved their supreme superiority
we reap the treasures from the trees they planted outta their blood
I wanna keep the pressure to realize our hands are covered in mudd
the pride of our nation doesn't come from the bulidings or resources
it's flowin in our veins, but all we mine is hate burning like torches
we're breathin the same air and celebrate our independence day together
but besides from that? I see a lot of things that can be done better
so excuse me mister, what happened to respect, courtesy and liberty?
we're deprived of dignity, our legs are shakin cause the ground turns slippery
blood is filling the streets, together with a breath of reckless evil
the youth don't care, spendin more time checkin if their neckless is legal
they're askin for role models, i say we need new remedy on the old bottles
together with voices to make sure the choices we breed never throttles

"so excuse me mister, what happened to respect, courtesy and liberty?
we're deprived of dignity, our legs are shakin cause the ground turns slippery"

This was my favorite line in the piece, but all together it was good, it flowed nicely and it was truthfully, and i felt as if you didnt let up anywhere...

Good Overall

i thought this was good

but not as passionate as some of your other pieces

feels like its missing something idk

but still a solid piece and good topic

i liked the lines that kid posted

"so excuse me mister, what happened to respect, courtesy and liberty?
we're deprived of dignity, our legs are shakin cause the ground turns slippery"

stay up homie 1

Thanks! appreciate u takin time!

UPPIN!!

we reap the treasures from the trees they planted outta their blood
I wanna keep the pressure to realize our hands are covered in mudd

that was nice^ and the bar the others above me posted..buttttt..b-bear ur pretty nice man..no lie..like ur flow and the way u explain shit its good..keep it up man liked it..uNo

Thanks^^ really appreciate it.. uppin for feeeedback ya'll!