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Quicksand

Posted: Sun Mar 05, 2006 9:02 pm
by Anonymous
Drama

Its March 6th 1997

My name is Anthony Jones. I am 36 years old, I have a beautiful wife named Emily and amazing daughter named Ashley, she turned thirteen yesterday. "Life can't get any better then this", that's what I try to tell my self, when in reality life just blessed my wife with cancer. I have no clue how to cope with this, I feel that I?m not giving my best for this family, yet i work eleven hour shifts trying to keep them alive and still trying to make everything feel right, like nothings wrong. As my daughter walks by I notice something, I found trails of pain and sorrow deeply engraved into her pale cold wrists. I could see in her eyes that she felt alone, felt like no one was around to witness her accomplishments, and no one really cared for her. As i thought deeply about this I realized. something about myself Yesterday, the day before her birth day she was trying to show me something, something.. ahh I can't remember. This was at the time when i started to see affects showing from my wife?s face and body from the devil god blessed her with, stress had me in his grasp so tightly I didn?t even take a second to see what my daughter was trying to show me. You might think that I?m a good person reading this. I thought I was too, until things went from good to bad, to worse in my life, I can't take this anymore..I feel trapped in quicksand at the same time tied in the devils spiral, like a falling angel trying to stay up with life as the heavens above sit and laugh at my weakly attempts. So I end this note with a quote that didn?t help me..but it may help you "Life can't get any better then this" ***The Sound Of A Gun Cocking Back*** to Ashley - I'm sorry to see that you have to stoop low enough to do such a thing, I?ve hoped and tried to give the best..you've always been the greatest thing i could ever give to this world..I love you sweetie....
Emily - Your the reason I've made it this far, I Love you so much without you.... I don?t know what i would do...

"I cant even begin to imagine what's going to become of you" I Said ***As The Bullet Of The Pistol Releases***


Note : (This is Fiction, And The First Poem Ever Written)

Posted: Mon Mar 06, 2006 10:30 am
by Borat
Dope shit i like this idea its a suicide note right.. well anyways i like the deep imagry keep up the good work

Posted: Mon Mar 06, 2006 5:13 pm
by Anonymous
i know its not the best..BUT LEAVE FEED!!!!

Posted: Tue Mar 07, 2006 5:04 am
by complexity
yah this was pretty talented, and had a nice twist of ending 8.5/10

Posted: Wed Mar 08, 2006 12:55 am
by precise
yea man, didnt know ya had it in ya! that was pretty damn captivating, 9/10, cause i have alotta trouble concieving poetry