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This is a recent song i did its going on my album "Imagine Me..."

feed would be appreciated...

This Wasnt Bad Man


Sounds Like You Speaking On The Track Not Really Rapping,

Fellings In This Were Pretty Dope.

aiight thanks

pretty good. i agree with Sequence that you sound like your speaking on the beat. It`s some chilled out shit. I could smoke a joint to this.

haha thanks

didnt like this at all.... flow was off every second, lyrics were aight, theres was no feelin behind this spit period. im not the best in audio but this was pretty lame.

lol why u gotta be so harsh to the rookies, u could of sugar coated it a bit...lol it wasnt bad, no worries though, you're about a the same level as the rest of our audio heads..keep it up

I dont think my flow was off...

but you think what you think thanks for the feed...

Whuts good young blood!? Well...it's good to see another audio-head around the site because we definately need more of those here on illest. So welcome to the site, just make sure you stay active whatever you do. Also...very very very important when it comes to the audio section...when it comes to track, if you want feedback, make sure you leave feedback for other artists drops. Alot of homo's around here tend to lack in that area...but we're gonna be workin on that soon. Feedback is extremely important because it helps guide an artist into the direction in which maybe he should be goin. I know I owe a few changes in my presentation to the feed that I was getting from Drunken Jesus here on illest. So let people know what you think of their shit and they'll gladly return the favor.

But back to business, about the track.

Instrumental- It was pretty decent. I like those R&B soundin joints...if I had that beat, trust me...I'd be doin sum damage! LOL So you seem to have good taste in beats so far.

Lyrics- Lyrics were decent. It was written with the right kind of emotion. There were a few parts that were slightly above par...but also a few parts that were way too simple and really brought the mood of the track down. Such as "...it only takes 1 flight..." Lines like that are too gradeschool. Try to avoid stuff like that. Overall it wasn't written too bad, but it wasn't enough to where I'd call it impressive.

Flow- It was on and off at times. I can see why Symbolikull said it was off...but I dunno if he knew what kinda presentation you were goin for. I do because I take alot of R&B tracks and rap on 'em. So you weren't off that much. But your presentation does need alot of improvement. It's just like they said. You need to try to sound like you feel your words and not sound like you're just reading them. Another thing is, is you seem to write with a little emotion. So now rap with the same emotion. You sound pretty monotone through the track. Raise ur spirits kid...spit like this was gonna go to a major label or sumthin. Act like ur career depends on it. Chances are if it doesn't sound perfect to you when it's done...then it's not!

Presentation Grade- 6.5 out of 10

Keep at it. The potential is there...you just need to work with it a bit.

16 Micz wrote:lol why u gotta be so harsh to the rookies, u could of sugar coated it a bit...lol it wasnt bad, no worries though, you're about a the same level as the rest of our audio heads..keep it up

sometimes... its better not to sugarcoat things... even with n00bs... so they can get better n know what they did wrong... comments like ghost's are to be expected when u start doin audios... constructive critisism... personal to some... helpful to others... just remember that

now on to the track...

i didn't hear too much emotion... flow went off at parts... learn to control ur breathing... just because the beats slow u shouldn't flow like the beat tempo wise... i mean u can do a slow flow to a slow beat and make it sound good... but just keep it up... i give this audio a 5.5/10...

love the feed thanks ill work on it

thanks appreciate it

i liked this track man i heard sum1 else use this beat but it was ok urs was pretty tight now im much of an audio head but u needa put more emotion in it get the listener into the song if u did that then maybe i could light up a blunt to this one

T.K.6 wrote:maybe i could light up a blunt to this one

Shit like that is why you are retarted..If you do drugs..no need to say it on a rap forum so that people can think your hard cuz you do drugs..GTFO

i was implying to what cee4 said