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Posted: **Mon Jun 18, 2007 9:35 am**

new track, leave feed and ill return the favor, feel free to leave some constructive criticism as well....

Posted: **Mon Jun 18, 2007 9:45 am**

i liked this more than anything ive seen from you. i liked the intro and outro the best though lol. the beat was cool and sometimes i think u were too fast for the beat but it was still good. the only problem is the micbut thats expected.

Posted: **Mon Jun 18, 2007 10:16 am**

omg16micz: yo yo
omg16micz: hobo
omg16micz wants to send file i Can Live.mp3.
Mr Drunken Jesus: good looking out, my recyling bin was looking a lil empty
omg16micz: lmfao
Mr Drunken Jesus received i Can Live.mp3.
Mr Drunken Jesus: vocals are way too loud
Mr Drunken Jesus: delivery and flow aren't as bad as usual
Mr Drunken Jesus: you still pause way too much though
omg16micz: oh
omg16micz: yea
omg16micz: i've been tryna work on tha
Mr Drunken Jesus: need to work on your rhyme scheme some too, its would be better if it was smoother
Mr Drunken Jesus: it'll help your flow alot
Mr Drunken Jesus: beat sounded alright if you made it
omg16micz: naw
omg16micz: lol
Mr Drunken Jesus: didn't think so
Mr Drunken Jesus: no techno synths
omg16micz: alright for u, is dope for someone else
omg16micz: lol
omg16micz: fuck u
Mr Drunken Jesus: do you say 16 50 cent at the beginning?
omg16micz: lol no
Mr Drunken Jesus: yo 16 50 tent
Mr Drunken Jesus: something like that
omg16micz: oh
omg16micz: lol
omg16micz: um, and thats that, u shud see me today peace
Mr Drunken Jesus: you sound like a fat kid eating marshmellow peeps rapping

Posted: **Mon Jun 18, 2007 10:18 am**

this reply was sponsored by marshmellow peeps keeping fat ugly kids satisfyed since 1958

Posted: **Mon Jun 18, 2007 10:26 am**

lol fuck u nigger jew

Posted: **Mon Jun 18, 2007 10:29 am**

LadySam wrote:i liked this more than anything ive seen from you. i liked the intro and outro the best though lol. the beat was cool and sometimes i think u were too fast for the beat but it was still good. the only problem is the micbut thats expected.

yea i need to get a new mic, and thanks for the feed, preciate it.

Posted: **Mon Jun 18, 2007 10:45 am**

nice song. I liked it alot, I wish I was this decent. maybe one day..in my dreams..

Posted: **Mon Jun 18, 2007 1:23 pm**

he said 16 VTZ...

Posted: **Tue Jun 19, 2007 1:21 pm**

uppin please

Posted: **Wed Jun 20, 2007 5:01 am**

i like this it was hot,but u stop too much when u rappin sound like u mumble some of ur words out
the beat is hot keep it up

Posted: **Wed Jun 20, 2007 6:20 am**

i liked this one man.... i couldnt really hear the beat too well, your rappin voice is a lil boring but no offense dawg. i thought the lyrics were solid and i thought you had a really ill ending. keep it up fam

Posted: **Sun Jun 24, 2007 12:25 am**

yoo i thought the song was tight but like uve heard the vocals are up 2 loud but otha than that its pretty tight

Posted: **Thu Jun 28, 2007 3:13 am**

your definitely gettin better homie, big props on the, you need to back away from the mic though.

jus keep recordin

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