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A Lil Somethin...
Posted: Sun Jun 03, 2007 2:26 pm
by Beast
I bless the mic like a reverend, my words assemblin,
Endin, kats offendin, my cypher, renderin….
They own defenses, spittin relentless,
Weak emcees I relinquish, fill the holes in ya wisdom
like dentists,
Paragraphs Blast Fast, My vast stash,
Of vocab'll leave ya ass stretched in a body cast…..
Now check that, step back, or get ya cap peeled,
My Rhymes feel like shotgun shells, and leave ya Body
chilled,
Killin rappers feelin hotter than usual,
Big P Gassed up like a fast truck but no one's feelin
you.....
Left rememberin ya pass memories like Brian, Stewie,
and Peter Griffin do....(Lmao)
Posted: Sun Jun 03, 2007 2:36 pm
by Beast
Posted: Sun Jun 03, 2007 2:38 pm
by Gutta
i wadnt really feelin...sorry homie... it seemed way choppy, and it seemed a lil out of order and when i read it out loud i didnt really think it flowed. but good start, keep workin
Posted: Sun Jun 03, 2007 2:42 pm
by 16 Micz
lol it was ok, nothing spectacular, but its not bad at all, keep it up, i liked the word choice in this one though,and the rhyming words..but anyway, hope to see more...duece
Posted: Sun Jun 03, 2007 3:22 pm
by complexity
The vocabulary was on point man. Pretty good.
Posted: Sun Jun 03, 2007 6:52 pm
by Kurse
Definately a good drop. Structure was a lil different...but I could still follow it okay. Very nice shit...keep droppin that heat.
Posted: Mon Jun 04, 2007 6:39 am
by Ambiguous Realm
different from wat im USUALLY seeing... it wasn't bad at all.. pretty good actually...
"fill the holes in ya wisdom like dentists"
i liked that line ..although i did heard it before bout 2 years ago.. still nice tho
if i hate to rate it i'd probably give it a 7/10 for the punch and multis
Posted: Mon Jun 04, 2007 2:05 pm
by Beast
Tha structure should'nt have been like that and Gutta it wasn't choppy at all in my point of view and thanks for tha feedback homies...........Gutta lets battle man lets see wutchu got man...
Posted: Mon Jun 04, 2007 2:36 pm
by Gutta
set it up and start it den..
Posted: Mon Jun 04, 2007 2:39 pm
by Beast
Aight then yo rules........Explain Em'...
Posted: Mon Jun 04, 2007 2:46 pm
by Gutta
House Rules
one round 6-8 bars
3 votes=K.O or first to 5 votes
send me the link when u set it up and drop
Posted: Mon Jun 04, 2007 2:50 pm
by Beast
Aight....
Posted: Mon Jun 04, 2007 2:52 pm
by Gutta
call me out
Posted: Mon Jun 04, 2007 2:54 pm
by Beast
Aight did it...
Posted: Tue Jun 05, 2007 4:52 am
by B-Bear
it was pretty good man, structure was out of the ordinary, but i followed the verse.. flow was a lil choppy in some places, but mainly alright and the vocab was tight! keep it up!