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I can deprive you of your life, deny you the write to speak what you like
When I write, rhymes, the only thing that's keeping my mind right
At times I thought I would die trying to hold a Mic I'm the type
That loads guns and pulls hammers, plus my rhyme style's nice
Like I know manners, you coming at me hard, but you'll cause no damage
I only take head shots like photographers that hold cameras
Catch me with a magazine, but I prefer to stay with the candids
Rollin with a mean girl like Rachel McAdams, I stay with the baddest
Bitches you neva met in ya life, most these MC's stay as sharp
As the wrong edge of a knife, holding on to they dicks instead of a Mic
Trying to fuck with bitches that will give em head if they trifled
Fuck with my ice I'll leave your head with a price, while U sleep
My crew will creep and leave you dead in the night, that's my advice
My whole click will leave you flipped, plus you hand me a pistol, kid
I'll watch it bust, and leave more motherfuckas dead than Bishop did
Leave you speaking your shit twisted like Autistic kids, my homies
Will find you in the streets and strip your bitch, touchin' mad breasts
Maybe get your address and hit your crib, listen I'm not the kid to be seein
If an AK's what I'm keeping, then I'm quick to leave your brains leaking
On the streets stinkin', especially if he the whack type, he get the gat
Dawg I'm still staying trifled, my raps is more addictive than crack pipes
I keeps it raw, plus I stay strapped like a Victoria's Secret's Braw
I'm the illest thang you ever saw, my rhymes is hard I don't dare stutter
But beware of Gutta, He roll with brothas who will make you die like HAIR COLOR
I'm quick to bang it on you like Shaq do to a hoop, like Papoose do to a booth
My life is full of lies, that's why I think im do for the truth, looking for additions
That's new to the coup, Most MC's is whack, they the type I beat up in School Halls
Matter fact I do recall, most these “MC'sâ€

Nice Man =] keep it up

^^^^thanks alot homie

damn it got pretty good during the middle, but all that gangsta talk is really played, i personally prefer rappers being themselves and rhymin bout new shit..but it was ok, pretty decent, you need to try to expand your vocab, use some multis, tighten up that flow, its liek da da da-da da da da--da, but keep it up fam, lookin forward to more drops..and activity

^^^^^ thanks dawg ill try and rap on some more real shit. yo i dont wanna sound stupid but whatchu mean by multies?

i really dont wanna explain em but,

(Multi Syllable Rhyming) or multi to put it Simple.

The basic Idea of a Multie are words that Correspond with Eachother, And how many Words you may use to creat a Multie, The syllables always have to match each other. If not that they will not Correspond and it will not be Considered a Multi. Many people will use hyphens or other symbols to show where their multie is placed though most advaced Textcees do not do this.But I will show you so This way you understand where the multie is. Here is a 4 Word Multie

Example 1.

Ive alwayz been known to Spit-from-the-Dome
Fuckin with me, Then you'll Get Hit-With-The-Chrome

Multies do not always have to be that big, you can do a multie with as little as 2 words

Example 2.

Everyone Knows That Solos-Hot
Im sick with the Skill and This Homos-Not

It works the same, but the more complex the multie is, the better.

The most common mistake people make when using a multie is having the words not corresponding with one another.



u shud check out text-help-101-by-solo-vt3038.html by solo good description of different catergories and aspects of writing

^^^^^ ight....

When I first started reading this, I thought it was wack. Things just didn't feel like they fit and it seemed very choppy.

So I read it aloud. And it's still choppy because of your textual placement on the page and your use - rather lack thereof - of your return key. Break those bars up, homey...!

But as I kept reading, stuff kept coming out and this was actually pretty nice. I stopped for a moment when I read "make you die like HAIR COLOR" because it was funny and dope.

Listen to 16 Mics and start breaking your bars up so your whole piece isn't one, big paragraph And keep it up.

^^^^ thanks yea it prolly sounds choppy cuz i wrote it pretty quick. i tried to add wordplay with a hard flow, i was tryin ta keep it hard but ya....im just used 2 writin rhymes in big paragraphs but from now on ill put bars around them and what not.. gracias

y everyone hate on gangsta rap in this site???

Dr.Dre hated on it in 2002. Its played.

so if dre hated it on it u guys should to?

its not JUST because dre talked about it... its still played out as hell... its old... n not alot of the people on here like that gangsta shit i know i don't

yo i wadnt tryin ta get everybody mad i was just wonderin why alot of ppl on this site aint into gangsta rap cuz i dk thats all i listen too.... i was just wonderin