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The Pain Is Over

Posted: Tue May 22, 2007 5:18 am
by CHINO
yet again an old post of mine from another site...

sever all ties binding rewinding the past
prior to slit wrists and shards of glass
a portrait in a frame turned to be the death of me
two souls united acted as a suicidal destiny
picture of perfection still drawn with many flaws erased
a edited cut of film scenes of violence were replaced
you never saw the directors cut simply a version rated
the truth requires parental guidance due to graphic hatred
many conflicts ended with bruises and me sayin that I love you
now I'm bleedin on the floor and still all I can say is that I love you
may satan show mercy on me as I bleed through the cracks of hell
my soul in eternal fire the scars on my wrist will swell
they're just another painful memory of the love that you and I shared
when times went bad how I would over react yet you and I still cared
it was this love that was eventually be my final demise
I loved you so much I couldn't stand the tears in your eyes
and knowing I was the cause I could put a stop to your pain
contimplated squeezin a trigger with one shot through my brain
but I figured I would die slow with pain by the glass in my veins
so perhaps we reincarnate the past and without me and ya happiness remains
know that I love and that's the only reason that I did this
who would've guessed to end your pain all we needed was me with slit wrists

Posted: Wed Jun 06, 2007 12:18 pm
by Stina
damn, i think that was pretty wicked.
the first few lines started to remind me of a book i read
"the picture of Dorian Gray"
which is a pretty sick book.

but yeah, haha anyways, good shit - keep it up :]

Posted: Fri Jun 22, 2007 5:41 am
by -TraMaTiK-
i was feelin this the whole way thru..all tho it seemed more like a nice deep verse rather then a poem..but so be it..i loved this bar tho

you never saw the directors cut simply a version rated
the truth requires parental guidance due to graphic hatred

hot shit^

keep droppin man..liked that shit..PeaCe

-Tramatik

Posted: Tue Jun 26, 2007 7:39 am
by Lawgix
this was wicked dude... nice job... love the words u used in this

Posted: Fri Jul 06, 2007 12:20 am
by Young K
That was really good...
Id give it atleast a 9/10...
The feelings were really intense...
Stay up...

Posted: Fri Jul 06, 2007 10:39 am
by Dead Silence
i liked ur wordplay in it it was pretty ill

yup

Posted: Tue Jul 17, 2007 5:36 pm
by JackKavorkian
Im into the Topic, and the Style, along with Depth of Lyrics. Some More multis would have made it Nasty, You did ya thing, i enjoyed reading...no hate.