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I take a seat and breath sighs as I see life rewind..
I breeze by these times seen through a teens eyes..
my dreams glide like an angel above the clouds..
aint neva comin down, till the day our troubles drown..
we're never the same again as we remember the days..
together we race the path down memory lane..
expressin the pain of sweat and tears, drenched in the rain..
no less than a taste, the good times etched in our brain..
now, years before the rap, I was lost and trapped..
in world of maps but locked doors along the path..
it brought sores and scabs, but it made me strong..
drained my brain on page to move the days along..
now I spit for expression cause I've lived through depression..
a different proffesion from what many think I was destined..
grippin the pen in my hand as though holdin my hope..
knowin I wasn't roamin alone, was my moment of growth..
discussin the part of life before percussion would start..
blunts in the park to puff in the dark cause we wasn't as smart..
or so we were told, low and behold, I changed state of minds..
I take a sigh, thinkin how I watched the days go by..

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[align=center]Not bad mayne, not bad..

The multies used were nice, well written and the vocab used was also at a decent level.

The flow was alittle shakey though and the rhyme scheme switched up a lot, but not too noticable.

now I spit for expression cause I've lived through depression..
a different proffesion from what many think I was destined..

^^ That was a nice bar, good vocab and good rhythm

Overall nice tight drop, kept me readin' 6.5/10[/align]

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discussin the part of life before percussion would start..
blunts in the park to puff in the dark cause we wasn't as smart..
^^fav line

nice drop slick always improving stay up man keep droppin this was doipe