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History In The Making

Posted: Tue Apr 03, 2007 7:31 am
by B-Bear
Just a lil somethin i continued from earlier.. appreciate feed..

consider me the modern moses writin my laws on slates
laws known as lyrics always provoking and teaching hate
jaws bite in hysterics like they're lookin for a head to rip off
it just ignite my lyrics and the written eager inside me
that provide me with desire to rewrite lines of history
what if was hitler was gandhi and my mom the mona lisa?
what if my dick was bigger then the leaning tower of pisa?
would ladies still admire it and say that's a piece of art?
or would they cut it off, leave my to bleed or stab my heart?
so many questions with unsolved answers burnin raw like cancer
doesn't exactly kill, but have a record longer then the bible
makes me sit down and call out for the disciples of hip hop
write a magical formula on the wall and make this shit stop
cause hip hop is reenterin the race after a quick pit stop

Posted: Tue Apr 03, 2007 8:43 am
by Ambiguous Realm
"leave a link" lol

Posted: Tue Apr 03, 2007 11:53 am
by drunken jesus
[8th on a hillbilly powertrip]you need a link[/8th on a hillbilly powertrip]

Posted: Wed Apr 04, 2007 6:02 am
by B-Bear
oh shit! im soo sorry...lol.. fuckin tired of that rule..lol

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Posted: Wed Apr 04, 2007 6:02 am
by B-Bear
Uppin for feedback

Posted: Wed Apr 04, 2007 1:46 pm
by ~Symbolikull~
wow dude your off wit your rhyme scheme somewhere, cuz its so hard for me to get thru your verses, your rhymes arent equal, and honestly your lines sometimes do not make sense, well not perfectly at least, no hate, jus statin my opinion..

Posted: Wed Apr 04, 2007 8:53 pm
by B-Bear
it aint really that hard.. lol... but anyway, i'll change it a bit till next verse.. thanks for feedback

Posted: Thu Apr 05, 2007 6:39 am
by Mac
Agreed w/Ghost. It Was Weak Honestly. Good Topic Though It Would Of Been Sick If You Handled It Better As Far As Flow Is Concerned. But Word, Keep Dropping.

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