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dis is a verse for a track im recordin tomorrow its a diss track to some dude who says da guy im doin da track wit took his name which is bullshit..but yea...i might actually b re writin it cuz it cuts into the chorus...not sure yet...but ill b postin the audio as soon as its done n shit...some feedback would b nice...so maybe i can touch it up


ya havent heard of me? im da reason u go to an AIDS clinic,i stay spittin till da page missin i can hear da snakes hissin left lost like bait while bass fishin, leave ur ass twitchin snuffed n smashed wit sin, get bashed wit pins n peeled of skin b real i win u feel da wind slap u attack u rip ur throat out before i even grab u, n wen im done u'll b farther back den united airlines during bankruptcy, u cant touch me i tear lines wit snare chimes get ripped in air mines u stare blind so ill give u a rough draft of a stuffed mac ready to spit out faster den busta rhymes track, whos original?? ur flow is lame earth to killah kurse ur a biter wit a stolen name get rolled n flamed im uncontrolled n bane wit a soul to blame for ya hole in fame,dude missed da rap wagon get slapped stabbin hes bitter cuz the saran wrap aint grabbin n ur rap career jst cant happen

get rolled n flamed im uncontrolled n bane wit a soul to blame for ya hole in fame


that line really bugs me, it just seems to be hard to understand...

but other then that, i really liked this, and i could imagine it would sound good in audio

I felt the beginning and the end the most

8.7/10

i can kinda understand that part.. its actually my favorite.. if the beat that u sent me is wat u guys r gonna record with.. the ending from rolled n flame really flows with it.. im not sure about the res.t. overall it seems decent for an audio 7/10

yea we didnt even use dat beat we got another one..we'll use dat one later...we wrote the whole song today n recorded it tomorrow were doin like voice overs n makin it sound right

oh alright then that's koo