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Quick Drop..

Steppin to me,I'm the person who u beggin to be..
U betta believe,I done surpassed wat u could neva achieve..

Maybe there'll neva be somebody as clever as me..
Who shines like ice, but can also bring it with a devilish heat..

Threatenin me? aint got guns but I'll hit ya n make ya brain split..
I avoid people who likes to cause problems and all this drama and shit..

Radio needs to stop wastin time puttin a shitty song askin for weak or teef..
aint tryin 2 cause a prob call me a vegetarian man cuz i got no time for stupid beef..

I rhyme for her n me, not for some rapper who i'm trying to be..
not the best at multis or a great textcee, but i got enough gas to fry ne emcee..

I''m chasin dreams, I'll stain ur white Tee, u aint erasin me..
its hard to believe, how much people can see in me n what I can achieve..

i make haters get scratched worse then an audio cd in a tipped over 360..
now that im improving they want to talk to me like I got a translator degree..

There's no stoppin me,im the new sixteen year old prodigy..
Don't disagree im hotter then a volcanoes lava, ash n debri..

lol i liked this short and sweet. i like writtens more simple, coz u dnt have to like look for anything its jus there
anywhoos

fav lines:

Steppin to me,I'm the person who u beggin to be..
U betta believe,I done surpassed wat u could neva achieve..


Radio needs to stop wastin time puttin a shitty song askin for weak or teef..
aint tryin 2 cause a prob call me a vegetarian man cuz i got no time for stupid beef.. << made me chuckle lol


I rhyme for her n me, not for some rapper who i'm trying to be..
not the best at multis or a great textcee, but i got enough gas to fry ne emcee..

I''m chasin dreams, I'll stain ur white Tee, u aint erasin me..
its hard to believe, how much people can see in me n what I can achieve..



lol yes i no i shoulda jus copied and pasted the hole thing.

LOL thanx Sam..n if u need any help im all ears aight..

thank youuuu =) ill get ur msn addy and ask u some shit

ur Using Multis Very Easily Lol. The First 3 Bars Were Nice as Hell And Flowed Great. it Didn't Flow So Well After That Though Until The Last Bar But Overall With Punches, Vocab, Multis And The Flow u Had at The Start, This Was a Good Drop lol. Keep it Up ur Gettin a Lot Better Fast, Keep it Up With The Punches But Step Them Up And Make Them More Unique. Wooord lol.

Maybe there'll neva be somebody as clever as me..
Who shines like ice, but can also bring it with a devilish heat..
Fav Bar^

Thanx for the feed..

rhyme scheme was on and off, the multis in the beginning where strait then you didn't use 'em and didn't match syllables a few times, structure and flow were choppy in places, but this is alot better than the other piece you dropped here

ill agree wit domino, first 3 bars were the best, you kinda fell off after that and started babblin. It was by far the best ive seen from you, but theres still room for improvement. Flow was choopy, vocab was decent, rhyme scheme was basic, and substance was aight, your message is all about you and the game, try sheddin some light on other topics, youll grow faster as an mc that way.

big ups kid

Thanx for the feed..