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As I reach toward -Perfection- i make my own -Correction- //
Otha rapers get mad wen they -Check Em- my lines drop u, u best not -Test Em- //
Hate wen people say their the best at rap, shit raps wat i -Best In-// (think about it)
U beta -Invest In- somthin asa form of -Protection- somthin lika -Vest'N- //
A skellkey for wen police try to -Arrest Em-, now i go ya -Guessin- //
YES my rhymes jus turned into a -Blessin-, teachin u a -Lession- //

Tired of these NON rappas -Bitchin- jus wait, soon ill be -Dissin- //
U wonder wats my -Mission- shit my gun is wat i really be -Clinchin- //
And i get to writin an make people -Flinchin- //
Now i got yall to -Listen- an i got ya people Wishin- //
I never came by an took ya fuckin daddys -Pentchion- //

Im greddy lik the -Grinch'n- tha Scruge givin u bad news start -Switchin- //
Ur head is wat im lenchin, den im leavin ur body on the gound twitchin //
Ur broke ass in the streets -Hitchin-, fora ride theres no pride did i -Mention-? //
Man ur paper is wat u should be -Fixin-, an stop -Mixen- other peoples lines wit ur rhymes in ur -Kitchin- //

this was straight, the multi's were on point, though the scheme was pretty basic, the content was pretty good. I'll give it an 8 out of 10, it was straight

wat complex said...i liked part of one of ur drops in the cypher..but to be honest u need to work on ur rhymes and punchlines..i'd give this piece a 6/10

this lacked any real form of rhythm

you need to work on wording shit too, some of its worded awkwardly

running a spell checker on it may do you some good too

and what multis tom? lol

want me to call them, just simple inners? or multi's

multis are 3 syllables or more, not one or two syllable rhymes repeated in a bar

doesn't matter if there repeated. I'm pretty sure some of them would count as multi's. I'm not going to debate any further though. Because I don't like being wrong

the multis tom is talking about is the kind most forum users or online textcees wouldn't call multis...

thank you mexico

your welcome USA

nice shit i love the multies it was a little basic though but nice shit i liked it keep it up

well "multis" is an internet term so you won't find anybody strictly offline using it

its derived from "multi-syllable" which you may hear offline cats using

lol, im pretty sure everyone knows its multie syllable thats straight forward. and for this piece, it sounds kinda basic, sure you have alot of rhymes in it, but alot of them were obvious rhymes, like i could just read the first bar and know all the words you were gonna use. thats my only beef, keep droppin man it was still decent

i know that's wat it is although i never judge it that way on text... usually multiple rhymes one after another constantly is wat i consider multis.. using more syllables i dont usually judge on but i never call it multis(even tho that's wat it is lol)i call mines rhyme-combinations...lol(no really i do lol)