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we're yet to see how my history develop, a mystery,
but give god a kiss from me and say that I'm comin
but for now I'm caught in between the tits of a fat chick
each represent a birden, sticking with me like a disease
pray to be released from my misery,but staying alerted
it's like my history all i can really do is conserve it
in an eternal archive before it return to my strive
sneek up on me like a tiger and drive over me repeatedly
like everybody else i admit it eventually defeated me
and treated me worse then afghans at guantanamo bay
feel empty like food cans cause i speak in dismay
how did this happen to me, like i'm throwin it all away
blowin shit up everyday without knowin exactly what to say
i'm blindfolded like i'm visioning the lights of heaven
while on the other half I'm terrified cause of shit like 9/11
the hippie movement saw room for improvement
that was the 70's, but what about the 21 st century?

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If U don't get somethin, juss ask me..

Yah This Was Dope as Fuck. u Gtta Good Way Of Like.. Tellin Shit..
but for now I'm caught in between the tits of a fat chick
each represent a birden, sticking with me like a disease
^Thats a Good Example Of it id Say. Flowed Real Nice And The Vocab n Multis Were Dope Also. i Think i Kno What The Piece is About, Lol But Yeah im Askin, Cuz Some Parts Might Have Strayed Away From it, id Say, Maybe u intended it Like That So i Donno Lmao. But From What i Deffo Got. This Was a Solid Piece Altogether And ur Gettin a Lot Better With The Way u Tell Shit n The Vocab So Word, My Fav Piece From u, Keep Droppin

thanks domino.. appreciate the feedback..

it was kinda of ment to have a bit of loose ends, where u sorta conclude yourself.. perhaps some of the lines where a bit too off point.. but i was tryin to make it all come back to like "i don't know", feelin me? like to cover up my message and make readers have to look in between the lines..

I liked the last half of it the most, you do have a good way of telling whats on your mind. I enjoyed reading this drop, good job

aiit.. good lookin out... appreciate feedback tha one and blitz

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