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[align=center]They Say Tha Midget Standin On Tha Giant`s Shoulder Can See Much
Further Than Tha Giant .. (Tha Giant ..)
So i Got The WHOLE Rap World On Mah Shoulder They Tryna to See
Further Than i am.. (Than i am ..)

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Way More Taller Now, No Way i`m Fallin` Down, Look Up Over ..//..
Tha Giant`s Shook Up Shoulders, But "Pressure" is Gon` "Blow" Like a "Shook Up Soda" ..//..
Tha Crook U Know Us, We Floatin` Everywhere, Sumptin` Parted Tha Truth ..//..
Whoo, Now Tha Think They Soldiers Got Tha Heart For Mah Troops ..//..
Even if i`m Shorter, i`m Still Taller Than U ..
Watch Tha Competition "Diss a Pear" Like "They Got Problems Wit Fruit" ..//..
i Got Tha Heart Of a Bum, Still Fresh to Death ..
Goin` Out of Mah Way in These Streets, Rippin` Mah Flesh to Shreads ..//..
i Started to Run, Didn`t Wanna be Next to Techs ..
Takin` apart Tha Trash Everyway i Pleased, Layin` in Boxes Left`em Bless ..//..
i Cherish Mah Warm House & Hot Food, a Mother & Nobody`s No More Worth Her Than i am ..
& Still ..

They Say Tha Midget Standin On Tha Giant`s Shoulder Can See Much
Further Than Tha Giant .. (Tha Giant ..)
So i Got The WHOLE Rap World On Mah Shoulder They Tryna to See
Further Than i am.. (Than i am ..)

Look at `em Man, i`m Known to Break Down Creativity, & Put `em in a Flow ..//..
Stuff This in a Pipe, it`s Pure Crack Bwoi !! .. Even Good Enuff to Smoke ..//..
i`m Sure That Bwoi !! .. Rell Will Only Needa a Second Too ..
Pull an Extra Weapon Tool, Tell Biggie He Was incredible, When i Send U to Tha Lyrical Heaven View ..//..
Fiasco, Even if i Got 3 Losses Bitch i Never Lose ..//..
it`s embedded To, Strictly Dead U Dudes ..//..
Competition is None to Tha Kid Tha`s Better Too ..
i`m One Of Tha Sickest Rappers U`ll Ever Met in Life ..//..
Half Of These Rappers Don`t Know Wat Multies are, Kid Tha`s Like Sayin` U Can`t Read, But Write ..//..
i`m Sumptin` Damn Cocky .. alot Of Hatas Wishin` Someone Will Pop Me ..//..
Probably ..
& all U Niggas Jumpin` On Tha Cock, Please i`m Lettin` U Know Nothin` Won`t Stop, Me ..//..

Why U Faggots Think U Know Mah Life ??..
& U Tryna Run it Like U Know Mah Strive ..//..
it`s Cute How U Kids Like Tha Gurl i Wifed ..//..

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it`s Funny Man ..
That Quote is From Jay ..
Lmao .. Put Up Wateva Kid ..
it`s Nothin` ..
i`m Much Taller Now ..
Get Tha Fuck at Me ..
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this was decent.

Even if i`m Shorter, i`m Still Taller Than U ..
Watch Tha Competition "Diss a Pear" Like "They Got Problems Wit Fruit" ..//..

i guess that would be one of my favorites. It was hotter in some places then others. You used a good amount of multis and a decent vocab. The lines were to streched at some points. Try to keep them somewhat the same length, instead of the wide variations you have now. itll help with flow. Topics was kinda played, but that doesnt mean it still couldnt be tight. Overall, it was decent. But yeah, good sutff, keep dropin.

GoodLookin` Out 8th ..

The chorus fit well with the piece. I must say.

For a cocky type of piece. It wasn't ubiquitous at all.

You stayed on point. I'll just quote some lines.

"a Crook U Know Us, We Floatin` Everywhere, Sumptin` Parted Tha Truth ..//..
Whoo, Now Tha Think They Soldiers Got Tha Heart For Mah Troops ..//.. "

"i`m Sure That Bwoi !! .. Rell Will Only Needa a Second Too ..
Pull an Extra Weapon Tool, Tell Biggie He Was incredible, When i Send U to Tha Lyrical Heaven View"

The worst part about this piece was some corny lines. Like the fruit one. I didn't feel that.

8th made an astute observation about the length of the bars as well

Uppin more feedback and more drops from you rell.

Rappers like you are very obscure. After you master your style. You will be very deadly.

Fiasco, Even if i Got 3 Losses Bitch i Never Lose ..//..


that line to me summed up what you were gettin at thru this whole piece, overall it was aight for me, the chorus had more of an attraction than the verses, you had some good content and stayed right on topic thru out the whole piece, id give this a 7.8/10

big ups, hope to see more from you soon

multis was on point lackin a bit of vocab and structure i liked the chorus overall good drop 7/10 keep em comin yo

Jay Z did the chorus for the record.

Yeah ..
it Was From Tha Song ... "Hovi Baby" ..

But Wateva ..
GoodLookin` Out On Tha Feedback ..