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The Last Piece(of garbage)
Posted: Tue Feb 27, 2007 2:10 pm
by Ambiguous Realm
i'll come at u bare like porn-events, hang opponents like ornaments, bodies all torn-to-bits, i was born-to-win every tournament... so like huricanes i flushed-the-news, it was 'complex' cuz i was rushed-to-lose so u can fuck urself the same way Hitler crushed-the-Jews
don't be 'disappointed' just don't expect-me-to-write!
and remove Smoke from the text-next-to-ya-site.(on google)
fuck structure in rap when i'm speakin-my-mind, sentences..each-in-a-rhyme
cuz i'm creepin-behind beneath-in-ya-spine to weaken-ya-climb,
so once ur half way up ur ready-to-drop, (and if ur still alive...)
i'll fuckin kill u!..like a virus cuz i'm too deadly-to-stop
lungs collapsed cuz u wouldn't breathe-when-u-could,
this venom's in ya skin.. it's deep-in-ya-blood,
i'm droppin clues like the thieves-in-ya-hood,
so here's the hint... i'm leavin-for-good...
Posted: Tue Feb 27, 2007 2:16 pm
by ~Symbolikull~
damn thats fire before smoke.... why you gotta quit jus spit when you can man. dont give up youd jus be another quittin loser.
Posted: Tue Feb 27, 2007 8:47 pm
by MesaR
crushing Jews Line Was Funny
Posted: Tue Feb 27, 2007 9:22 pm
by -TraMaTiK-
~Symbolikull~ wrote:damn thats fire before smoke.... why you gotta quit jus spit when you can man. dont give up youd jus be another quittin loser.
i agree wit him^
Posted: Wed Feb 28, 2007 1:04 am
by B-Bear
yeah.. shit was hot.. he just tryin to play precious man.. haha.. that's why his mumblin bout' quittin all the time..
Posted: Wed Feb 28, 2007 3:34 am
by Typeo
Good shit like usual man, but eh...You make it seem forced with some of the multis. Not all of them rhyme that well, but if it was actually spit it would flow damn nice. Wouldn't say multis...but flow is fucking on.
Posted: Wed Feb 28, 2007 4:43 am
by Spoof
wow great stuff! sounds good and flowed well
my fav lines:
i'll come at u bare like porn-events, hang opponents like ornaments, bodies all torn-to-bits, i was born-to-win every tournament... so like huricanes i flushed-the-news, it was 'complex' cuz i was rushed-to-lose so u can fuck urself the same way Hitler crushed-the-Jews
fuck structure in rap when i'm speakin-my-mind, sentences..each-in-a-rhyme
cuz i'm creepin-behind beneath-in-ya-spine to weaken-ya-climb,
so once ur half way up ur ready-to-drop, (and if ur still alive...)
i'll fuckin kill u!..like a virus cuz i'm too deadly-to-stop
keep it up!
Posted: Thu Mar 01, 2007 6:11 am
by B-Bear
Spoof wrote:
my fav lines:
i'll come at u bare like porn-events, hang opponents like ornaments, bodies all torn-to-bits, i was born-to-win every tournament... so like huricanes i flushed-the-news, it was 'complex' cuz i was rushed-to-lose so u can fuck urself the same way Hitler crushed-the-Jews
fuck structure in rap when i'm speakin-my-mind, sentences..each-in-a-rhyme
cuz i'm creepin-behind beneath-in-ya-spine to weaken-ya-climb,
so once ur half way up ur ready-to-drop, (and if ur still alive...)
i'll fuckin kill u!..like a virus cuz i'm too deadly-to-stop
That's like the whole verse.. haha..
Posted: Thu Mar 01, 2007 8:58 pm
by urbanhistory
^^ lmao shit was good structure kinda all over but a good drop over all
Posted: Thu Mar 01, 2007 11:33 pm
by ~*Blitz*~
Yeah this was defo a hawt piece, good shit
Posted: Fri Mar 02, 2007 5:15 am
by |.R.SON.aLL.|
Yeah ..
This Piece Was Sick ..
Tha Multies Were On Point ..
Kinda Fell Off On Some Parts ..
But i Liked Tha Verse Overall ..
Wordplay Was Deffo Nice ..
Structure Coulda Used Some Work ..
Posted: Fri Mar 02, 2007 7:07 am
by complexity
Over-rated drop. The last bars weren't good at all.
The opening paragraph was the best. It had nice flow & was on point.
The rest was blah.
The multis are really the only thing that was real nice about this drop.
8/10. Not hating. Just the truth. It was still pretty dope if it didn't take you long. Which I'm sure it didn't. Just leaving honest feedback. Something people need to learn to do.