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i no the structure iz blah but whatever..lol leave sum feed plz

i wanted 2 tell u what im feelin here its gettin hard ta keep concealin it here
so im gonna reveal without fear cuz ur eyes are bright like eel's and its clear
like fabolous i hope u juz stop n breathe cuz im in the spotlight like damnn
i got caught 4 a 'rock or leaf' but now i hope u spot me n see
i aint on the block 4 cheese im lookin 4 sum love i can
cop n rock with ease im talkin bout the 'S' to the 'A'
no sex 2day im bein real relaxed this way
ull undastand im juz me i aint in no escalade
or got fancy cars or tryna be sum fancy star
i wanna no whats inside of u,see if u down'ta ride boo
and slide thru life without strife and be by myside 2
help me cuz u no ill be there 4 u and i care 4 u
always down'ta take a bullet in ur deepest 'diss-pair' 2
but will u defeat the odds and secrete ur power of god?
i know its hard bein a mom takin the heat with a kid & a job
but thats why my shoulders here and ill be ur soulja here
will u juz open up,show me whats been broken up
so i can hopefully mend it 2gether with whats bein spoken,yup
i wanna get closer i wanna feel ur touch..plz tell me iz that 2 much?

uppinnn..

yes it is too much, no offence but this shit was wack, shitty and it sucked horribly. now i aint sayin you suck cuz ive seen some decent shit from you, but youve been on this lovey dovey shit and you suck at it, get off it, do what your good at, i dont like you, but that doesnt mean im gonna hate on you, if i had to rate this i would maybe give it a 2/20. Trust...It was lame as fuck...wasnt feelin it one bit.

im sorry but that shit didn't flow at all..
i liked the lyrics towards the middle though, not much made sense in the beginin for me but maybe thats jus me

ye i know it wasnt good like my other pieces but i was feelin it at the moment i wrote it,so i juz key'd it up u no..butttt thanks 4 the feed i take it in..good lookz everybody..-1-

gotta agree with the others, didn't catch the flow.. didn't have any I guess.. seemed like u sorta concentrated on creatin multies more then ya phrasing of words..but know u'll come back stronger tho....

ye i know lol but thankz

I liked how you attempted to intricate your rhyme schemes.

Overall this had emotion. Yet no illustrious content. A little bit
boring. We should collab.

thankz plex..n ye man it wud b cool if we collabed..hit me up on msn [email protected]

U Gettin` Better Famo ..
Tha Structure Was Meh ..
But ! .. i Still Felt Tha Flow Of it ..
i Think it Was Better Than Wat People Made it Out to be ..
Or Maybe it Was Juss How i Read it ..
Either Way ..
it Was Solid Kid ..
Stay Topz ..

thankz rell -1-