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What U Call It?

Posted: Sat Feb 17, 2007 12:20 am
by B-Bear
I hear rappers claiming this game lacks credibility,
produce less legatee then a sterile woman's fertility
but u'll remember me before life put an end to me
depressive thoughts so I drown myself in hennesee (don't know how to write that shit... lmao)
forensics be examing my body like what he do to me
walkin dead and mysterious like the death of Biggie
always talkin dead serious like they wanna bury us
people are curious, why's he diggin that grave?
till i go furious and enslave their immense rave
roll my cigar out and smoke it proudly in the open
stroll far out, I'll be back disguised as the Omen
haunt em like a norwegian version of the grudge
before I jugde on whether to slaughter their dignity
sublimininal brainwashin'll develop them to a criminal
so what's his excuse when he stands in front of God
or maybe he'll join the chorus of a gospel with the POD
I don't know, we're yet to see how his history develop
it's a mystery, but give god a kiss from me and say I'm comin

Posted: Sat Feb 17, 2007 12:21 am
by B-Bear

Posted: Mon Feb 19, 2007 11:51 pm
by B-Bear
gotta say it's quite an impressing feedback I'm gettin..

Posted: Tue Feb 20, 2007 5:24 am
by complexity
This seemed to have a direction, I don't think you reached it though. A lot of lines that contributed towards the topic. Yet didn't make the piece any doper. 7/10. At least your trying to be creative & rapping about more then the everyday topics.

Posted: Tue Feb 20, 2007 11:52 pm
by B-Bear
thanks.. appreciateing someone takin time to writee me some feedback.. been gone for like 3 weeks and suddenly i'm a ghost.. but yeah, was told to try and include more creativity in my verses, so i tried.. seem like i'm walkin the right way tho..

Posted: Wed Feb 21, 2007 6:48 am
by Irate
Yeah Man, A Good Vocab. But Flow Seemed Off At Points..
PZ

Posted: Wed Feb 21, 2007 4:04 pm
by RH1NO
I LIKED IT THOUGHT IT FLOWED WELL TIL THE END DROPPED OFF LIKE TO SEEN MORE AT THE END BUT NICE PIECE

Posted: Thu Feb 22, 2007 1:42 am
by B-Bear
aiit.. good lookin out.. thanks for feedback irate and da guy

Posted: Thu Feb 22, 2007 8:38 am
by ~*Blitz*~
nice ending, good drop woulda been straight if it was a lil longer

Posted: Fri Feb 23, 2007 7:23 am
by B-Bear
aaiit.. appreciate u takin time to write some feed.. yeah, could've been a lil bit longer, but felt it sorta ended where it ends.. so yeah..

Posted: Sat Feb 24, 2007 8:55 am
by B-Bear
haha.. ait thanx man.. apprecaite u takin time..