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Pull Out Ya Pockets Cause Yall Wanna "Loan-This-Rap" My Multis Are Hot Like I "Own-This-Cat"...//
A Zone-Infact Leaved U Hunched Like I Thrown-Ur -Back And Ears Bleeding When I Blown-This-Track/
Im Visable Like Im "Clear-To-Gleam" Im The Only Player So Come Alone and "cheer-Your-Team"...//
Dont Fear-To-Lean When Im "Near-Your-Splein " Cause Ill Insert Dagers Just to "Hear-You-Scream...//
Turn Off The Switches Throwing Knifes Like Im "Flinging-It-Fast "Cause I Enjoy "Killing-In-Dark"..//
Ill Laugh And "Sing-In-My-Mask" Cause Kid Multing With Me Ya Just a "Thing-In-The-Past"...//
Im Running Around With Viscous skill And Im Sick-With-Complex Ill Rap On The Mic Or Stick-With-Text...//
Cause Who Ever Im Battling Im Slick-With-The-Next Ill Make Then Look Foolish With a Dick-To-Your Head..//
Shut Your Mouth So u Gotta Shit Debress-From-Ya-Bum Smack You That Hard Its A Struggle to Breath-From-Your-Lungs....// And Bend You Like From Your Nees-To-Your Tounge When i Suck The Rest Of These-Outta-Ya-Gums....//

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Best Drop i Seen From u. Multis Were On Point The Whole Way Thru, Flow, a Couple Nice Similies. Keep Droppin ur Gettin Better...Fast Lol

yea this is actually the best thing ive read from u fellow ausssiee! keep it up mate

Dont Fear-To-Lean When Im "Near-Your-Splein " Cause Ill Insert Dagers Just to "Hear-You-Scream.../

loved that line..^^ well overall it was nice u lil kangaroo lova lmao j/p but ye man it was nice that was my fav line,but nice multis,ur gettin up there hot shit stay droppin -1-

fuckin dope dude, can someone say ELEVATION
lol i copied a line while reading it that was my fav n it turned out to be the same one tramatik copied lmfao

but yea, gettin good with them multies, kind of getting into similies but not quite yet, your getting good n descriptive now tho

good drop keep it up

the beginnin was tighter than the end, the whole thing was ill though. keep on droppin kid, i love seein elevation and this is elevation jus like precise said

big ups kid

Wow. You have so much potential. Now work on making ur bars smaller. And getting rid of a lot of unnecessary words but still getting your point across.

Props though.

plex some ppl write long bar style and sone write short bar style, like most long bars can be broken down into short bars but it jus depends on personal style and how they like to read it, yuh know, yuh feel me? i see where your goin wit it though, and dude does have mad potential, kids only 12 and already got mad skill

again mad props kid keep elevatin

Word, I Agree With You All. This Was Tight, And He Definetly Has Potential, Keep Up The Good Work Man.

Ghost. The people who use long bars. Don't do audio though. Lol.

He could break them down into shorter bars possibly. Either way
using long bars with useless words isn't good man. Its a bad habit.
You are using to many words to get your point across.

Aha nice verse SequencE...multies were ill...you've showed me some of this on MSN already but I'll just leave feed (like you told me to on MSN)...

Multies were craaazy...and it still flowed well...structure was a little ehh because of the length of the lines, but you still pulled it off...

Only problem I saw was that some of your multies weren't very even...like

" Running Around With Viscous skill And Im Sick-With-Complex Ill Rap On The Mic Or Stick-With-Text...//"

'Stick with text' has 3 syllables while 'Sick with complex' has 4, so it put off the flow a little bit...consitency helps alot...

Aside from that this was one pretty ill verse...stay up...

And...

"Ill Make Then Look Foolish With a Dick-To-Your Head..//"

I seriously hope you were talking about a chick here...I really do...lol...

Keep at it...1

lol thanks errbody...upping?

Yeahh this shit is dope.. Multies were bomb.. Flow was good too.. ~1~