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They Say The Devils Gotta Place For All Of Us
Different Level, Different Ranks Are Sins Seem To Follow Us,
It's Got Me Here Feelin' Hollow Plus I'm Tryna Swallow Lust.//
Same Shit Nother Day, Keep A Closed Fist Never Look The Other Way,
"Keep My Head Up" Is What My Mother Say, But I'm Gettin' Fed Up
Cuz Today's Jus Another Maze, With A New Path. News Flash
Few Blast N Lives People Lose Fast, But It'll Be Different When
You Crash, So Ask Ya Self Why You Laugh. I Sit Back N Use Hash
To Let My Mind Drift Away, Stress Is Heavy, You Can't Lift The Weight,
It's No Test Get Ready, Everyone's Gotta Live With The Hate, Some Committ
There Fate, But It All Depends On How You Fix Ya Plate.//
The World ? I'm Tryna Find My Spot In This Place.
A Krooked Smile Is What I Got On My Face, Hopin' By The Cops I Dont' Get
Caught Or Even Chased, Shot Or Erased, The Top Is Where I Wanna Be Placed.//


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Post by ~Symbolikull~ »

this was aight man, structures a lil off but the concept was aight. some of yuh lines dont make sense but wit some re-wordin and some help wit your structure this shit could be tight as hell.6/10

big ups
i'll smack yuh with rage i force multis outta my ass to the page
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Post by precise »

i was feelin it, ill agree a couple lines wasnt makin perfect sense but its more of an audio style like itll make sense if ya hear someone spit it lol, but for sure man im likin it, n i havent seen youre name before lol so its good to have ya hear bro keep it up
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Post by |.R.SON.aLL.| »

This Would Be a Good audio ..
Tha Flow Was Pretty Solid ..
i Was Feelin` it ..
Keep Droppin` ..
U actually Got Some Spark in U ..
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.. it`s S.a.W Bitches ..
.. Niggas ain't Fuckin Wit Tha Team ..

JayGUNNa
RELL FiaSCO

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Post by -TraMaTiK- »

word..it wasnt bad decent 4 a lil drop..nothin id quote tho,no hate but keep droppin it wasnt bad man
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Post by ~*Blitz*~ »

havent seen alot from you if anything at all...(lol?) but this was cool and it'd be straight to see more sooooooooo keep em coming!!
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Post by $hayne »

Thanks for all da feed.. appreciate it.. anyone wanna battle ?
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