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i no i need alota work but im trying!! so leave me feedback harsh criticism accepted lol..i jus wana learn i hope u like ittt <3


ive come to figure that you all rap coz you've got something to say/
tryna show the world how ppl like you survive from day to day/
dedicating your whole mind to what you love/
its like some of you are possessed to showing your natural glove (writing skills)/
verse to verse, you never cease to amaze/
curse after curse, these haters cant fight off your glaze (light/fame)/
its like a maze/ only your stuck/ cant seem to find any good luck/
to help you earn a few million bux/ you sit and think life just fucking sucks/
fuck all the hating/ forget if your failing/
'if you don't suceed try and try again'/
jus get back to it and lift up that pen/
remind yourself your mind is your best weapon, your best friend/
this is to show i apreciate your "two cent"/
it doesnt matter what your saying, diss or no diss/
your creating art as beautiful as this miss (me)/
just remember who your are and where u started/
theres nothing more wack than an emcee who
forgets where he came from, coz thats jus plain retarted/


i think my ending was a lil wack but its all i culd think of haha
feedbackkk assholes!!!plz and thanks!

ive come to figure that you all rap coz you've got something to say/
tryna show the world how ppl like you survive from day to day/


1st bar^^^ simplistic yet has meaning...see ta me(and i aint juz sayin this cuz ur a girl this goes for EVERYONE)even tho it was simple it had meaning...like i told Sammy on Msn its the Content u noooo..but i also like this bar 2....

verse to verse, you never cease to amaze/
curse after curse, these haters cant fight off your glaze

overalll its wasnt bad honestly...ur trying which iz good and ur makin an effort ta sound good(unlike sum ppl names wont be mentioned lol) so stay @ it,it takes time..-1-

wow good job hanna

rhymes are simple but still flowed well so its ok, specially ok for a beginner lol

you put good feeling into it which is excellent and held a topic

very good! keep practicin n droppin more!

Up until the last bar this was hot, i liked every bar, every bar had somethin behind, as much as you may think your weak this was fire, i really enjoyed readin this, no offence to the femcee but this is prolly one of the best piece from a lady ive seen. congrats and keep it up.

big ups girls....

thanks guys!!
uppin for more??

uppin for a link...follow the rules please..

wat link and wat rules?

word...gooood stuff...def kept to the topic...lots of emotion put into it...simple rhymes..but they worked really well..the ending wasnt bad at all...i mean of course it wasnt perfect...but i thought it ended it just right....keep it up sam.....u might be the first dominant writing femcee...lol

YAY ty viral

awww sammm im so proud of u, we SHOULD SO make a sam crew, me, u and blitz but nnoooo blitz sam is already in a crew...no sams united = (

=( i no! we need another sam now
i heard plex is really a girl maybe we can make his name sam!?! hahaha
dnt kill me plz plex lmao

OH i see how it is, just brush me off *heart broken*

im down for making a crew with you two if your serious let me know, ive got a bunch of shit ive written and im going to bombard this site with it all at once and leave my mark =)

lol we should blitz..a femcee group with all sams..thats hot

fuck yea, im down.

YAY