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Juss a quick lil piece I wrote yesterday, hope ya'll like it

started out as fourteen, used hip hop as my morphine
developed as a dream, but struggled with the self esteem
it seemed to me that rappin would always stay a dream
but as time evolved, problems eventually solved
my desire resurrected, was injected with obligation
felt other's constant admiration and my own recovery
created an empire of confidence in my reckless writing
despite myself bein the same fragile soul figthing
it seemed clearer, I'd been blessed wih a powerful tool
bullied through elementary school, thought I was the fool
now they say the penitentiary's cruel, and now I rule
never tasted the payback, but it has grown from way back
ya'll better stay strapped, cause life tilted in my favour
taste revenge's flavour, now ya moms aint here to save ya
fear is the world's most underestimated known weapon
flowing in the air and in ya system, what'll happen?
it's growing wihout knowing, it's our own personal terror

it seemed clearer, I'd been blessed wih a powerful tool
bullied through elementary school, thought I was the fool
now they say the penitentiary's cruel, and now I rule

feelin that part the most...^^


overall it wasnt bad lil homie..see u tried usin a different range of vocab which is always good...lil bitta multis...sum meta's..feelin it man..not bad 4 justa lil drop...kool shit -1-

aiit.. thanks bro.. much appreciated.. uppin for feedback

Pretty Deceant Drop, One Of Your Better Ones That's For Sure Man. Kinda Basic, Could Be More Creative. Over All Nice Drop Though Man.

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Favorite Line(s):
"started out as fourteen, used hip hop as my morphine"
"developed as a dream, but struggled with the self esteem"

thanks.. hard to be creative when rappin bout that topic tho.. but i'll try an improve my creativity.. know i need to work on tha, but thanks for readin through the piece..