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Show me a light through the clouds
a path that looks right and allows
me to take flight, passed this life
make the stars shine a bright color
a white that blinds me from the fight
but tonight its dark like my heart
the stars hide, the clouds are thick
everything outside makes me sick
as i drive through all this shit
lifes a bitch so i wont lie for it
in reality i cant die cuz im not alive (continue later)

Pretty Nice ..
i Liked it ..
Even Though it Was Short as Hell ..
it Had a Nice Rhythm to it ..
i Look Forward to Writin` More ..

yeah man... i need to start gettin into that concept... it was a great peice... can't wait to see the rest of it man... good job as always

Shit was Hot for a short one Thas whassup

make the stars shine a bright color
a white that blinds me from the fight
but tonight its dark like my heart
the stars hide, the clouds are thick
everything outside makes me sick

^^ my fav part of the poem, it went together really well and i like your views. Anticipating the rest of this piece, good stuff!