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Wake up

Posted: Sun Jan 15, 2006 2:26 pm
by Viral
virals back to spit a quick-suggestion i file tracks to stop sick-digestion, ima deliriouz ryhme-writer n i decided to make the times-brighter, jst spittin a minimal lip wit a sinnical flip to dribble a ship usin a miracle hip, the forum drops gets back up stumbles den flip-flops thought it was posed to end at the tip-top, not a diss but a revival of lyrics me n tom ended friendship wit a rival of spirits, bet ur diein to hear it...all da new guys fear it, went on vacation to gather my thoughts ended up lifeless so i rather b bought, big boi's all alone no 3000 to rap wit, purple ribbon comes back wit an album to crack whips, how can u say u stack chips? under the table wit a bat to rack back ribs, heres my tip work ur way down from the nip hit the spot and reach down for the slip, discreet sounds from the clit, repeat rounds for the hit, restrict blood flow like pluggin a flood hole im stuck in a mud bowl wit chips and a stunt troll, can u hurry up n get this blunt rolled? revived to make a point survived to
shake the joint, wheres the ill-ness if no one is postin to take the point?



came back after a month to see wats up...its dead...so i shed some light in the writtens...hopefully to inspire people to write somethin...that way...people who r new and come....will want to stay...cuz theres things to read and leave comments on...


not claimin to b better-than..but i consider myself a veter-an

Posted: Sun Jan 15, 2006 2:42 pm
by Guest
hhmm nice id give it a 8/10 really nice for a freestyle..like the vocab as usual n the rhyme scheme lol i saw a diss dont deny lol jk but yea nice piece keep it up n welcome back.

Posted: Mon Jan 16, 2006 8:34 am
by 16 Micz
that was me ^

Posted: Mon Jan 16, 2006 9:31 am
by complexity
Yah this was pretty good, for something to get you back in the game. structure was really fucked, you were probably just being lazy, but it still had some nice content, 8/10

Posted: Mon Jan 16, 2006 9:47 am
by Viral
complex wrote:Yah this was pretty good, for something to get you back in the game. structure was really fucked, you were probably just being lazy, but it still had some nice content, 8/10
lol yea it was...n i was hella lazy..jst tryin to get somethin together..i was gonna start off with the usual bars and everything...but i was like...fucck it

Posted: Wed Jan 18, 2006 6:17 am
by precise
not to bad for a freestyle, spent most of the time tryna figure out what you were talkin about haha, but yea, it was coo 8/10 just to copy everyone else lmao

Posted: Thu Jan 19, 2006 10:28 am
by drunken jesus
Rhyme scheme was cool, now just work on not forcing multis