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They wait for me patiently, anxiously, gracefully
these rappers cant relate to me, im everything they cant wait to be
but i faithfully stick to my roots, and honestly spittin the truth
constantly gettin the loot, only trust my chick and the crew
but even they start pissin off dude so i give em a boot
i cant figure where to start, these rappers breakin my heart?
these trappers and actors, albums actually makin the charts?
wack emcees fall off just gradually,so until micz decides to smash a beat
ill let these bastards speak, cause most of these witnesses are like pistons
they come after heat and startin bitching, start snitching
they whind up with arms missing,or making their moms miss em


check me out,
for those who r atleast decent,give me a reason,
to knock out any contender that i see breathin/
keep feinin, for the gun, ill leave ur year w/ 3 seasons,
cuz im pretty sure ull fall when he sees em/
to be meaner than me?the demeanor, keep dreamin, hes evil
dont get me fucked up cause i ignore diseased creatures
i have no rivals, but my life is so vital
cause ive wrote bibles that dont have no title
i came a long way,ive cured dieseases,curses, even typos in one day
all these lame rappers, claim the game after, the fame and chain snatchers
deteriorate their name, and they wanna blame rappers, for all being the same?
i got a foot and knee in the game surprisingly im the best emcee in the game
but i dont wanna, be in the game, me and the game, dont belong, like G and THE GAME
so its, no surprise, when i told u guys that there is no ties you know why?
you see i dont hold pies, smoke guys, or have 26 inch rims with those tires
but i spit the sickest and everyone realizes this kid is gifted
if he would just get the picture and get to spitting
he could even get the bitches and a couple million
you see, the cup is filling and its a lovely feeling
i dont want to reveal em, but its a fake thug im hearin
sayin he spray slugs and kill em, not even laced up with venom
i never start wit niggas, but i cure viruses like norton nigga
keep talkin nigga, since u so cheap, fill you body with bleach bury u in a sheet coffin nigga
u say ur heat is sparkin nigga? i got a dog with flames, and hes barkin nigga
not often pull triggers but ill box a few niggas
drop a few niggas and have 4 by 4's on top of you niggas
lets return to the same, micz you're use to
the same ol' usual cat who spits a diss every blue moon
i smash minds when i spit,moisturize dimes when i spit like jergens
so if my lyrics are shitty, when i spit i say im kursin(get it?didnt think so)
super like mario, deadly with a harming flow, he calls it, fear factor
so i always shit on-tario like bullshit backwards(how bout this One)

Should Of Stopped At The First Little Paragraph. Was Lookin Pretty Dope, Then You Just Fell Off. Wasn't Half Bad Though. Keep Doin Ya Thang.

5/10

i know this mother fucker didnt give me a 5....the concept wasnt really about rhyming this time it was about creativity i see you didnt get most of the lines thats why u gave me a 5 but its all good thanks for the feedback ill soon return the favor.

If The Concept Wasn't To Rhyme, Then You Should Of Just Wrote A Story For That Matter. I Thought It Was Weak, An Not Even Hardly That Creative. I've Seen You Do A Lot Better. But That's My Opinion Take It Or Leave It..

Ill leave feedback on this soon, starting to feel a little better going to get something to eat

the whole viral dissing it getting redundant

the first verse was really tight

as it went on like i said it was a little redundant
though you did tell try to tell a story which is good

your molding a style though more then you have in the past, which is really good, and a very positive thing i noticed from this rap

not bad, and looking forward to some more

alrgiht thanks i guess this is all the feedback ill be gettin so.. let me explain these 3 bars

i got a foot and knee in the game surprisingly im the best emcee in the game
but i dont wanna, be in the game, me and the game, dont belong, like G and THE GAME - this is pretty simple but just incase anyone didnt get it.. G as in G Unit and The Game...


i smash minds when i spit,moisturize dimes when i spit like jergens
so if my lyrics are shitty, when i spit i say im kursin(get it?didnt think so)- as for this one i say i smash minds, now if my lyrics are shitty i say im kursin...which in a way im dissing demented minds cause kurse shit on him.... get it? demented still my nigga tho



super like mario, deadly with a harming flow, he calls it, fear factor
so i always shit on-tario like bullshit backwards(how bout this One) - as for this one.... when i say i shit "on tario" im dissin someone as well as usin a dope ass line...what it means is on tarion or tario is some kind of greek w.e god or some shit but anyway he was the one who hunted and killed a "bull" or a taurus hence the name taurus or tario.... and in other words... bullshit backwords is when i say shit on tario which backwards is tarioshit(bullshit) get it. im so fuckin ill im immune to you diseases.

the first part was written well, it had a good consistant rhythm to it, the second looked like shit in comparison, the flow and the lyrics fell off they started picking up in the middle but fell off again at the end