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on a mission to defeat the belief in superstition
usin my x-ray vision, i'm only finding depression
my reluctant selection, this suprisingly detection
can't be described by any possible expression
reorganize ya brain befor joinin in on my session
I'm walking beside ordinary people like Jesus
he's invisible, but the Bible says he sees us
why don't u release us, from the pain that seize us
learned he grieves with us, pull up his sleeves with us
what he achieves with us, is the feeling he leaves with us
I act viciuosly, but i defend myself ambitiously
in daily occasions, whenever i find it needed
and by words, as an emcee, feeling I'm underachieving
got that spiritual fire that'll help me suceed
I am stubberness, and got desire, need that to proceed
and evolve my lyrical chapter, I'm becomin a rapper
got a message to deliver, so u just got mail
so get the shivers, I'm enjoying my elevation
discovered my relevation - time for celebration


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Pretty Good Piece
U Extended Your Vocab A Lil .. N Had Some Deeper Meanin in This Which I Liked N Was A Thumbs Up .. Uhh Fav Line " im becomin a rapper got a message to deliver, so u just got mail get the shivers"
Keep Doin U Man `1

thanks.. !

i liked the end pretty nice, overall the verse was pretty straight, nothing too outstanding but the vocab and rhyming was nice, the thoughts and messages were on point i liked the title as well keep it up
fav Line:
I'm walking beside ordinary people like Jesus
he's invisible, but the Bible says he sees us

iw as gonna quote that 16Micz lol but ye lil man nice shit keep droppin

lol.. aiit, thanks..