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Spirit Inherits The Skill Of Thrill Marriage Is Repaired With Pills N Kills
Chills Jus Grill My Grill Jus Fills Lyk Its iLL Its Real, Young Needa
Move The Skunk Prove Them Punks U Cruise Wit Chunks
pack The Hugest Pump fa War At Large , Make It Rain Shells
Pour Till Sparked i Wont Remain Poor In Heart Hazard Corna
Store Da Mart , Pigs catchin My "Birds" Report On Mark
Class'd Bagg Pack'd Record On Chart , The More In Dark
Lerkin The Block Clownin Chumps Wit Fire Circusin Roc
Workin The Spot Construction With Bricks U Move Cum Wit Ya Shit
im Pumpin in Bits Stuffin The Script "Keep Feastin" Movin
Weiight Jenny Craig Will "Meet Meanin" Spread It Lyk
"Meat Heatin" Show Yall "GREEN Stacks" When My Weed Bleeds In
Hustlas Flowin From The Soul 2 Devil Youngin Movin Boldaz Neva Sticks
Or Stones No Lessa Hold Ya Pebbles Ya Cheeks Jus Stuck
I "CUM Fa BUCKS" Touch My Bunch I Love Da Pump(Of Cash)

ur structure def gotta betta lol nice doe 1

Horrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrible.

This isn't poetry at at all man.

Is english like your fourth language. Thats the only excuse for this shit man.

"Spirit Inherits The Skill Of Thrill Marriage Is Repaired With Pills N Kills
Chills Jus Grill My Grill Jus Fills Lyk Its iLL Its Real, Young Needa"

Probably the worst bar of the year. Marriage is repaired with pills n kills. What the fuck is that?

Honestly could you imagine saying to someone "you know marriage is repaired with pills n kills". They would think your a fucking lunatic like me. If you have a concept. If you think marriage can be killed with pills then word it better. Be more lucid/understandable. You could say something like

"marriage is repaired with abortion pills then they wear off and its killed"

Now you are actually explaining to your viewers. Instead of giving them
random thoughts to work with.

"Store Da Mart , Pigs catchin My "Birds" Report On Mark"

What the fuck is this shit man. Honestly if this is the best metaphor you can come up with. I suggest you stop rapping now.

"Weiight Jenny Craig Will "Meet Meanin" Spread It Lyk
"Meat Heatin" Show Yall "GREEN Stacks" When My Weed Bleeds In"

Real nice multis right there. You must be proud of them. They fit in perfectly with that bar that makes absolutely no sense. I mean trying to decrypt all the fucked up shit you were thinking in that verse would take a big fucking retard. I mean maybe I'm crazy but I think you see think that any bar you lay down is cool and it makes sense. Which isn't the truth at all man. Just because you say something awkward as hell that only you would think of. Doesn't make it creative. It makes it fucking weird. And their is a reason nobody else says it.

"Or Stones No Lessa Hold Ya Pebbles Ya Cheeks Jus Stuck
I "CUM Fa BUCKS" Touch My Bunch I Love Da Pump(Of Cash)"

Honestly that is the most disturbing wordplay ever and makes absolutely no sense. Are you saying you have sex for money? Why not just say your a prostitute. Or is that to much vocabulary for you man?

No offense man. Your improving sometimes. Just not this time.
I suggest messaging me on aim again. This time I might actually be online. We need to get you some help immediately. Doctor !

Thats Better

IF you keep telling him its better its good. Nice structure. He is going to keep rapping like that and never get better. Be a critic not a fan

Nobody is going to "Cruise Wit Chunks"

no no no...what he wrote was terrible... it was just saying better cause i moved it from my section haha

Fuck you

"how Fast Can U Move It?"...answer is pretty damn fast haha

wow...you alittle hostile today?

lmao like hitler

LMAO LMAO

i didnt think it was that bad, actually sort of liked the flow u through me off here and there but it was pretty decent no quotable lines but still decent 7/10

lol This Guy N Hiz Anger psssh