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Imagine never relaxing, you'd mentally crumble
I ascended with a splended tremendous rebuttal
I've been accused that I ended a couple
only reason you hate me is I pretended to love you
maybe I did, there's too many memories to juggle
I ain't wasting my time on another identity struggle
I've went through the waves, battled the tides
got really blazed, lived off natural highs
my heart broken and empty, its an ugly horrible sight
never knew a mind could be a torture device
the horrors of life, got you thinking in retrospect
the only way you can forget is drinking yourself to death
all I ask for is respect, but its hard to earn it
I got millions of miles to go, I'm that far from perfect
girls rock your world one day, then its an avalanch
if I kept her a bit more happy, would I have a chance?
its bad, I have this habit of being nice as hell
then if we fight its like, I always need to right myself
alone in solitude again, its like I always lose
my bodies bruised and all I got is booze
so, I'll take another shot in, drink another beer
all of you are stupid, talking to me, thinking that I'm here

damn bro this shit deep n i fucks wit this heavy tha meesage solid ur style is on point i couldnt say anything bad about it good shit

Imagine never relaxing, you'd mentally crumble
I ascended with a splended tremendous rebuttal
I've been accused that I ended a couple
only reason you hate me is I pretended to love you
maybe I did, there's too many memories to juggle
I ain't wasting my time on another identity struggle
I've went through the waves, battled the tides
got really blazed, lived off natural highs

Loved this..

never knew a mind could be a torture device

so true, feeling the wrath right now lol

the horrors of life, got you thinking in retrospect
the only way you can forget is drinking yourself to death

I Agree

all I ask for is respect, but its hard to earn it
I got millions of miles to go, I'm that far from perfect

God damn plex.. that second line

girls rock your world one day, then its an avalanch
if I kept her a bit more happy, would I have a chance?

Exactly lol

its bad, I have this habit of being nice as hell
then if we fight its like, I always need to right myself
alone in solitude again, its like I always lose
my bodies bruised and all I got is booze
so, I'll take another shot in, drink another beer
all of you are stupid, talking to me, thinking that I'm here

Good closer bro...


Overall this was harsh reality man,
so realistic... Really liked the hard hitting lines
and rhyme scheme.. glad to see this, Keep it up

Imagine never relaxing, you'd mentally crumble
I ascended with a splended tremendous rebuttal
I've been accused that I ended a couple
only reason you hate me is I pretended to love you
maybe I did, there's too many memories to juggle
I ain't wasting my time on another identity struggle

my fav was the intro lines. the rhyme scheme here was pretty
sick and it just flowed smoothly and was pretty intricate.
the first 2 lines def set it off too. the rest of the verse
was good but not as tight as the quoted portion i think. nice drop tho i can hear this on a beat too.

As usual, people quote the part I wrote before, in comparison to the continuation.

I appreciate the feed.

definitely wasn't horrible for my first piece in 8 months.