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--I have fed some pieces since my return to Illest, but if ANYONE would like me to return the favor and feed/reply to any of their pieces, please just leave a link or the title to your piece after your reply to this thread. Thanks.--

Something I feel I needed to get off my chest... I hope some people can relate...

There's a legion~of~deep thinkers who uphold the freedom~of~speech
Expressing what we've seen~in~our~dreams, hoping to lead~us~to~peace
The news asks us to read~it~and~weep, but I feel it's not-the-mission
I would rather be the opposition, speaking on my behalf instead of politicians
Who say they've got-the-wisdom, but leave their followers without a pot-to-piss-in
Our sleepless nation without a cot-to-slip-in, while they're getting caught-with-women
Who aren't their wives, yet say they are-the-victims, they teach~us~to~vote~for~'em
But these are leaders~with~no~morals who see~us~as~low~forms~of...
Human beings... What's the use-of-being a human-being that's labeled~feeble?
When we were raised to believe in the same dream that God made~us~equal?
When did the Strange~and~Evil become the name to the road-of-life?
Yet many of us know-this-flight has no destination, no hope-in-sight
I bet you didn't notice-,right? Don't feed me the lies~and~deceit hiding~beneath
The lines~that~you~preach of reaching dreams when I'm here dying~to~sleep!
I'm forced to find~it~in~me, try~it~and~see how much you feel-ignored
Letting people steal-the-source of our individuality without knowing what's still-in-store

I can respect this peice...multies for the most part held where cement although you it seems to me you had a little struggle with the change ups although that may just be me and not the way youd spit it....a pretty even flow but you started off stronger then you finished and it waned to the end....overall a nice peice that left me wanting to read more keep up the good work

There's a legion~of~deep thinkers who uphold the freedom~of~speech
Expressing what we've seen~in~our~dreams, hoping to lead~us~to~peace
The news asks us to read~it~and~weep, but I feel it's not-the-mission
I would rather be the opposition, speaking on my behalf instead of politicians

Nice opener. Multies are clean. Nice content, as well. Definitely something we should all be able to relate to.

Who say they've got-the-wisdom, but leave their followers without a pot-to-piss-in
Our sleepless nation without a cot-to-slip-in, while they're getting caught-with-women
Who aren't their wives, yet say they are-the-victims, they teach~us~to~vote~for~'em
But these are leaders~with~no~morals who see~us~as~low~forms~of...

I'm really digging where you're going with the content. At this point, I'm familiar with the technique and skills you bring to the table. Nice as always.

Human beings... What's the use-of-being a human-being that's labeled~feeble?
When we were raised to believe in the same dream that God made~us~equal?
When did the Strange~and~Evil become the name to the road-of-life?
Yet many of us know-this-flight has no destination, no hope-in-sight

You continue to breeze through the rhyme schemes while upholding a tidy structure and staying on topic.

I bet you didn't notice-,right? Don't feed me the lies~and~deceit hiding~beneath
The lines~that~you~preach of reaching dreams when I'm here dying~to~sleep!
I'm forced to find~it~in~me, try~it~and~see how much you feel-ignored
Letting people steal-the-source of our individuality without knowing what's still-in-store

Love this closer, it was representative of the piece as a whole, kind of summed everything up and drove the points home. I love the schemes you used here with those multies. Shit was legit. Sorry it took so long to feed, fam. Lol. Stay up.