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yea i wrote this shit tonight.
spat it few mins ago nothing fancy.

should i finish it?

just a little more emotion behind some of those bars but this is good man. you are progressing, see what happens when you practice instead of booty ballet lol

Nice lyrics, flow was on point with the beat as well as the subject matter, get you a chorus and this joint has some potential.

step ya bars up work on your delivery try to be consistent in context and to answer your q, no.

leeroi green wrote:step ya bars up work on your delivery try to be consistent in context and to answer your q, no.

i wouldnt expect a hater to want me to finish anything
thanks for that 1 line sentence feedback. although none of my bars needa be stepped up. my lyrics are fine as is. i need to work on my delivery and i recorded this in 5 mins basically to send it to CBK to peep but ended up posting it as a rough draft instead.
this song is gona be stellar when i get done

niice anti the beat is epic, an like i said id like to write the chorus if ur down.......

well...honestly i dont have an idea for a hook yet. send me something my way and ill see how well it fits

You've progressed from the first track I heard from you, you still need a lot of improvement, but we all do at some point. You're lacking emotion, and your delivery still doesn't fit the beat. I mean it's better than your old ones, but it still doesn't sound right yet.

Keep on practicing bro, with your lyrical abilities you're going to be a beast once you master this out.

The beat is hard as hell, I'd def save that, and re-finish it in the future.

word thanks Majin, who are you anyway? you seem familiar, i use to post at war lab also.


but yea like i stated, i didn't really "rap" this i just didn't it as a test run for the lyrics. ill try to step up my delivery for this one. when its finished ill be reposting this.


i may have a spot open also, if anyone wants to get down on this track holla