Dead mans gun
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- Enders
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Dead mans gun
UM, my verse isnt perfect yet, and it wont be till i finish PCSing, but the whole concept is there. If anyone likes it and wants to jump on vs 2. If not, oh well.
Pest wrote:[center]"Enders is an enigma wrapped inside of a paradox in the middle of a riddle"[/center]
- cyanidesyn
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Re: Dead mans gun
this track has a wiz khalifa feel 2 it but tha concept is far from wiz all in all nice drop i do pose this question 4 u y dnt u jus get into r&b or pop cuz ur singin isnt bad at all it had more of a pop soft rock feel then hip hop but wit new school hip hop its gettin harder 2 determine wats wat anymore
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Re: Dead mans gun
Cuz I can rap, but being one dimensional is gay. And I don't listen to rap, which I why I prolly spud like something else and why I can't say who wiz is. Thanks for the feed though, I appreciate it.
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Pest wrote:[center]"Enders is an enigma wrapped inside of a paradox in the middle of a riddle"[/center]
- cyanidesyn
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Re: Dead mans gun
i dnt jus listen 2 rap i listen 2 all music n i feel u about bein 1 dimensional but i cnt sing but i do ghost write 4 more then 1 genre i jus need 2 find a band thats willin 2 use my lyrics
Re: Dead mans gun
Enders ... alright man ... there's some potential here for sure ... the mix is OK. From like :44 - :56 you hit a really nice groove. You strike me as one of those guys that has some soul and wants to stretch out ... try new things ... but is being boxed in by the lyrics you've already set out for yourself ... What I mean by that is there are moments where you rush and then slow down ... things become inaudible and awkward and I think it's because your trying to make your flow fit your words instead of the other way around ... but there are moments where everything falls into place ... I think you've got a lot of promise man ... keep sticking with it ... be your harshest critic.
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Re: Dead mans gun
I said,
I guess alvin kicked me off this track.
Darn.
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I guess alvin kicked me off this track.
Darn.
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Re: Dead mans gun
The flow was on point, mixing needs to be sharpened up, but the vibe, flow and lyrics fit the beat well, I see potential here, keep sharpening the skills.
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