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I’m the stereotype White when I’m on the mic
Cause I run the “pen”, and then read you the “writes”
Deadly pasty, just like the chalk used to trace me
Fuck fitness, just this sickness keeps me shapely.

The irony is I’ll die from the dirt on me,
six feet deep, no white sheet will cover me.

I sleep on my feet, can’t stand it one peep,
One sheep is what I reach when i lay on the beat. [one, tw…]
I keep the cloud wit me drown the loud like Whitney
If risky, my bloc’s wit me, SPF fifty
It’s sick these men try to touch me, like Sandusky
My pen’s state’s annihilate, wait, tell em Puffy [Burn em in the Flames]

Here comes a brand new flava of the Year
Time for new flava of the Year
I hope you like vanilla, bland, and clear
Time for brand new flava of the Year

(i'll do 2nd verse later)

this seems decent but it started out waaay strong imo..
but ended kinda weak..no hate..

the flo was pretty on , but unless its gonna be a real audio it'll be hard to get ya exact scheme...especially on the last part (Flava of the year parts).



I’m the stereotype White when I’m on the mic
Cause I run the “pen”, and then read you the “writes”
Deadly pasty, just like the chalk used to trace me
Fuck fitness, just this sickness keeps me shapely.
^^^
I will admit that i reaally liked this part bruh..great flo
and puns..just wish you rode this level the whole time...

but like i said if this is an audio its probably not too bad..

here return the feed pls>> this-feelin-vt24689.html

was iight... i think the structure and what not could come a little better...
was short...
Seemed pretty young to me...
idk,,, i cant catch comeones ideas with just text...
call me a hater its whatever.... 6/10

This was decent. Rhyme schemes were a little basic, but it was still entertaining. The flow was alright, but to me it didn't seem as smooth as it could've been. I liked the SPF fifty line, I thought it sounded dope. Overall, not bad, but nothing really stands out either which isn't necessarily a bad thing.