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Its been a minute but I did it!!! haha

did the best job i could on it... feedback???

http://www.illestlyrics.com/board/mpr-v ... ml#p189436

http://www.illestlyrics.com/board/pound ... ml#p189440

in the beginning you sounded like that guy from Fort Minor,
I liked the beat.. You came in pretty strong.
I feel like the tone/loudness of your voice was coming in and out
almost feel like you could of used more feeling.
This shit has a nice vibe though, And you went in real
I like the lyrics.. I think I like the hook at the end the most.
shit was smooth with the beat man.. It just took me by surprise..
I almost wish you could of used the hook more..I could see
ton's of been vibing with it. this was nice, keep it up lawgix

ty sir i appreciate it... i personally think i kinda rushed it... but i think it turned out pretty decent... yeah the hook just came to me... lol truth be told i did the ending hook before i spit any of the lyrics at all... haha... but thats just me ty for the feedback tho its appreciated and let me know when u got a piece up in the writtens i'll feed it bro...

Yeah this beat is way tight, has a great vibe. That hook man... Thats the bread maker right there... Like Haz said, that verse would up the vibe of this whole track so much... and i see what Haz was saying about the vocals coming in and out, but i think thats just because at certain points of the bars you emphasized some words with extra emotion and energy, kinda just makes them "pop".. The lyrics are straight raw man, real talk. I always look forward to your drops.. keep them coming man

Beat is really dope. This is something I could see myself spitting on. I like how you came into the beat. I feel like the emotions came through really well, but your voice does seem to fade in and out sometimes. I agree about wanting to hear the hook a little more. I thought it was fucking dope as well. This is good shit fam. That stand on the grave and blantantly cry line is something I can most definitely relate to.


This is solid man. I cant wait to hear more tracks from you in the future. Keep dropping!!!

nice choice of beat but would like to see a lot more character in the the track... than a just words on a track but in in all it might just be me cause im more into like a crunk or club type, but don't get me wrong im also into yela wolf and eminem type but they also show a lot of character in their songs.. good track practice make perfect..

BennyBones wrote:nice choice of beat but would like to see a lot more character in the the track... than a just words on a track but in in all it might just be me cause im more into like a crunk or club type, but don't get me wrong im also into yela wolf and eminem type but they also show a lot of character in their songs.. good track practice make perfect..

lol @ practice makes perfect... appreciate the feedback man

dude i liked this.. but there were parts were it was like you were talking instead of rapping (emotional influence) MORE UMPH!!!

lol

nah good beat selection lyrics were tight.. its nice to see you dropping again keep it real

thanx man yeah i just got tired... i did this while i was starting to get sick... so it doesn't have a lot of umph to it haha... i'm still sick... felt better today but now i feel like crap again...

hmm i hear what they mean about your vocalz ..theyre tough to hear
in certain spots..the flo is mostly on....but you juggle it a few times..

the beat is on that mellow emotional vube so..i felt ya deliv style was
good for that type of beat..the hook was pretty sick tho...

all in all this would be a dooope song if you fixed the flo and vocalz a bit... maybe rerecord when your feelin better....

Holla @ Jah boy...1

Lawgix wrote:[soundclick]11365487[/soundclick]

Its been a minute but I did it!!! haha

did the best job i could on it... feedback???

http://www.illestlyrics.com/board/mpr-v ... ml#p189436

http://www.illestlyrics.com/board/pound ... ml#p189440

if u died i would cry an be sad..

this shits hot. i remember hearing immortal technique on it. i liked the way you did it where he used it as a love track type shit u used it as a more spoken word of urself and how u view rappin which is the same as i view it. good music and nice flow. parts here and there were lil choppyish but lyrics were tight. deliverys on point i think and u brought emotion to the beat. good job man i like this.

ty sir Anti... appreciate the feedback... yeah this was the first track that i've done in a long time... so i had to get my game back up lol

i like, just givin a listen trollin as usual sorry i dont have much to say but i did enjoy
be easy

lyrics are nice G, can empathise with that aswell

multis are nice, so is the flow, cant help but think the beat is a lil too slow for you, but each to there own innit

Yo this is nice man, the beat is veryyyy smooth good bars too