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Scared to dream or just impaired to see
the change that was in her and me
surely we, could imagine such courtesy
but the thought alone is cursing me
burning me to the point I'm sure to see
the difference and the rebirth of me
permanently, never to die or purchase thee
reversing me into a position meditated
then I waited as the words penetrated
hitting attics, then left the basement
mind educated, opened doors, thighs segragated
wet floors been evaded as we brainstorm
body plays the an-chor as I wait for
another date or another chance to save her
another life-vest for another try yet...
as we floated something changed her mindset
as time left what was to control my breath
I see her eyes set on the brightest sky left
the water washed away the tears her eyes wept
as I grip onto her hand hoping theres time left
swam from the deepest of feelings to surface
found purpose in parts she found worthless
a little belly where no longer birth lives
pipes bursted and time became more observant
her eyes show hope when she used to curse it
her pain worsened and she needed an exit
as we set in, cover ourselves in the wetness
waiting for every gallon we decide to let in
is it all a blessin' or just another message...

Scared to dream or just impaired to see
the change that was in her and me
surely we, could imagine such courtesy
but the thought alone is cursing me
burning me to the point I'm sure to see
the difference and the rebirth of me

Favorite part.

I liked this all the way through.
good piece , keep it up

really like the brainstorm body plays anchor line. i lost the flow a few times on the first read but the parts that i caught had a really smooth flow. my only issue was that content quality is not consistent some parts are proper dope where as some feel a little filler. but overall i think the verse is dope. has a feel to it.

Thanx guys

"swam from the deepest of feelings to surface
found purpose in parts she found worthless
a little belly where no longer birth lives
pipes bursted and time became more observant
her eyes show hope when she used to curse it
her pain worsened and she needed an exit
as we set in, cover ourselves in the wetness
waiting for every gallon we decide to let in
is it all a blessin' or just another message..."

Was tight mang. Feelin it for sure.
I love the alteration used.
Solid vibe and rhyme scheme.