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Posted: Sat Dec 16, 2006 9:02 pm
by MesaR
Word Felling that....
The world I see it as a cell a being as a membrane if I leave will it be the same?
Tears of joy let you feel warmth, the tears of pain always feel like a cold rain.
The air that used to be clean is poisoned with hate and jealousy, it kills like cocaine.
Cool^^
Posted: Sat Dec 16, 2006 10:27 pm
by complexity
The question is, will it get here?
The biggest problem is we never face our problems we always flee in fear.
I really don't know quite get your direction with this piece. You couldn't kill yourself one moment. Then evil had a grasp on you the next. Ill have to re-read it maybe. Or you can help clarify.
Overall it was a good read. Nice emotion, etc.
Posted: Mon Dec 25, 2006 5:32 am
by Haz
Itz Pretty Str8 ..
Posted: Mon Dec 25, 2006 7:29 am
by -TraMaTiK-
i seen betta JJ but it wasnt bad...juz work on ya structure...ye i aint no expert eitha wit it juz leavi ya sum feed homie -1-
Posted: Wed Dec 27, 2006 3:06 pm
by Momeijah
I've seen and done it all and feel its time to fall.
If I could give my life I'd let you have it but, I'm falling in this pit.
It feels as if I'm burning the wheels of life keep turning.
^^ Fav Lines. Turned Out Ok in The End But i Donno Exactly What The Topic Was. Some Parts Seemed Like 'Stuck in a Rut' Kinda Poem. Others Seemed Like 'Hope'. Which Kinda Falls into The Same Thing But it Flowed Well. Well Done