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Something simple

EVILUTION

Its a chemical reaction as i was a lab rat,i turned fiend./
Its an inevitable pattern,your shag lacks the journey /
of big testicles i orgasm with,i have a bad sack,learn gs./
Take a trip through my vision,my snakes will strip your hearts mission/.
Break ya lift as a king in ya place of shit compared to my dark prison/
You seeing the future,yet 2012 is the end of hell/
im breathing in sewers,test this realm ,im sent to wealth/

im Hardcore,cant find my past thoughts
its behind my ass.

my heart pours out blood for the ones that cant pump/
the last thought was love,seeing the mirror...jumped/
the mask falls as the dove comes back with the twig stump/
feel like noah ,finding new land after the rain/at first kneeled to the pain at hand,then move past,past the pain/

to when i wasnt a man,the time of the good kid days.
looking at the scenes like im living these/ ,went through my kid life till a teen
thats when the dentist pulled out my wisdom teeth/.

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-- Fri Dec 09, 2011 7:30 pm --

Shag is sex...or fucking incase you didnt know

-- Fri Dec 09, 2011 9:42 pm --

Will leave 2 links later

-- Sat Dec 10, 2011 2:06 am --

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Its a chemical reaction as i was a lab rat,i turned fiend./
Its an inevitable pattern,your shag lacks the journey /
of big testicles i orgasm with,i have a bad sack,learn gs./

thought you're intro could of been stronger.

Take a trip through my vision,my snakes will strip your hearts mission/.
Break ya lift as a king in ya place of shit compared to my dark prison/
You seeing the future,yet 2012 is the end of hell/
im breathing in sewers,test this realm ,im sent to wealth/

I Liked this , especially the last 2 lines.


feel like noah ,finding new land after the rain/at first kneeled to the pain at hand,then move past,past the pain/

I like this line 2 ..


to when i wasnt a man,the time of the good kid days.
looking at the scenes like im living these/ ,went through my kid life till a teen
thats when the dentist pulled out my wisdom teeth/.

I felt you rushed this, could of came stronger.

Overall this was a Decent piece, Next time aim for a stronger beginning and end, that's all.. Keep dropping man.

Thankz haz,upping

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this was aight...not really a lot of stuff that stood out to me...but it has a lot of potential...keep writing brah

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