Hip Hop Forum

Topic: About todays Fake Rappers.

I heard your a street soldier, I'm a cannibal, so I prefer your meat colder,
the only thing thats sticky, is your hands from fat Nicki,
you couldn't write no bars, if rhymes hit you like crowbars,
you fakes have ghost writers, that aren't bright, like most writers,
these rappers were born fakes, I'm eating them up like Cornflakes,
I wanna hear hurtful curses, enough to make them look like virtual verses,
these rappers are only in the game, cause I mention there lonely names,
they rap from 8 til 9, but there thick, so they wouldn't know the date or time,
talking about money n cars, honey n stars, I'll give those rappers ugly scars,
I used to listen to the radio station, but now I have CDs, so now I use my stereo station,
todays rap is garbage, I don't understand how they rap, they have crap knowledge,
Rick Ross said he used to be a hustla, I'll brick that tossa and throw him into a crusha,
elevation has begun, I need to get 100% elevation done, so I can reach that destination son,
Now I'm back tougher than leather, I'm rapping now stronger than ever,
these rappers can't kill anything, last thing they killed was there worrying, cause they read my thing,
no ones ganna feat over your beat, don't test me, cause you'll even get fucked up on Sesame Street,

Lol..actually pretty good BUTTTT ... rhyming line by line is too choppy, sometimes rhyming everybar seems a bit choppy...you should incorporate more multis in your piece. But hey thats just My oppinion man. Keep doing your thang tho cuz.

I heard your a street soldier, I'm a cannibal, so I prefer your meat colder

Now I'm back tougher than leather, I'm rapping now stronger than ever,

favorite two lines.

Cheers man, thing is though, when I try to change the style it sort of fucks up the style lol, this actually was just focused on getting the message across as well

kind of a strange bar layout..

the 2 rhyme bars are kind of simplistic in value
with how it was written
there was some solid line in there but it left a lot to be desired

keep dropping and elevating man

Yeah I finally found a topic I could talk about so I did this, the beat I was writing over was like the way I writ it, thats pretty much why theres like a 2 rhyme sentence.