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So it looks like i win via another no show LOL i'm really gettin tired of dis.


But heres the verse i had ready:

Write 7 Bars on the following....

...you were just kidnapped by Terrorist, had your head covered up, and have no idea where your going


It was a day like any other ... just patrolling the war zone, taking enemey Fire
people retreating seeing plenty retire ... alone in the field now as i start to prespire
proceeding with caution .. but got struck in the head. had to be metal, feeling nothing but lead
was taken a prisoner now with something to dread preparing for torture but with any luck i'll be dead
room full of troops smelling fumes from the soup .... hearing the sound of Reloading of Rifles
prevoking the rivals, refusing to abide by the War crimes act ... leaving no Hope In the bible
piercing my skin with broken glass invoking facts...as i scream, they were just Joking back
laughing Toking hash, as i begin to slowley start to see my demise, i just Hope its fast
but still they Keep me alive...mumbling in other languages as they continue to interigate
as he removes my hood, grabs a pair of blades; stares awaits then proceeds to tare my face
blood dripping ... "this isn't Fair, now wait" puts the hood back on and says "Prepare to die"
only the rare survive, as i make one last plead for them to STOP, and spare my life
but they bound me to a chair, as a door opens to a sudden silence in the chamber
as i say my last prayer, can only blame myself ... cuz by enlisting initiiates a Compliance to the danger














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niiiiiiice post quix,
flowed well throughout an stayed on point.nice use of fact aswell like them smoking hash an shit all relevant if like i presume you were kidnapped by muslims.

nice closing line aswell i dont know if that is an actual american millitary quote but it seems like it.

overall this was well done an jenk wouldve had to bring his a game to match this shame to win via a no show but to quote glams piece...... thats life

Wow.

Shame the person no-showed!

It was a day like any other ... just patrolling the war zone, taking enemey Fire
people retreating seeing plenty retire ... alone in the field now as i start to prespire

Nice opening bar.
Painted a great vision, and got me interested.

I loved how much detail you put into this piece,
Everything from smoking hash, to "awaiting" to cut you.

Closing line was great.
Kinda a tongue twister, too!

Absolutely loved this piece. Nice drop!

Props! <3

Thanks for the feed Dream and CBK. i'm glad yah both liked it.

nice drop man painted a good picture had the right content wasn't overly complex so the message kept integrity..

enjoyed it man

keep dropping

Excellent imagery. The way you described the events with out using any visuals really helped us get in the perspective of under the hood. The only complain really is the grammar on the last line. I think I get what you were saying but the wording is weird. Flow was good and the multies were all pretty natural sounding. A great entry overall. It's a shame you got hit with another no show. In another tournament even. Sheesh.

allways appreciate feed from you guys.

pretty sick piece Quix...Im digging the flow and how you painted a nice imagery some parts felt kind of off though...or maybe I just slowed down the pace too much...either way this was a nice topic piece breh

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thanks Q