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Posted: **Thu Dec 01, 2011 6:49 am**

You ever heard an angel whisper as you dream of success//
or hear the bells toll,while your thinking of death?//
What if all you ever knew,was just all in your head//
and all those things in your head,took the form of a test?//

If its not what it seems,then it probably isn't//
you should double check your vision,and see what you been missing//

See I.......don't PLAY when it comes to this GAME//
Final Fantasy FINATIC,who abused that COCAINE//
in TRUTH I'm so LAME,that I'd rather be CRIPPLED//
its like God called the FOUL,you could say DOUBLE DRIBBLE//
so I...hold my own like Its just my composure//
n raise my middle fingaz to all you fake ass posers//
can't say I never wrote ya,I just came indirect//
fuck a threat nothings left,you should come to accept//
that when Im pressed I wreck like Im speaking to death//
conceptualize that,before you beat on ya chest//

don't have time to finish

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Posted: **Fri Dec 02, 2011 2:51 am**

This is decent. It started off really nice but when you switched it up to a more basic rhyme style, it sorta lost its firepower. Still pretty nice but the openeing was best by far.

Posted: **Fri Dec 02, 2011 3:01 pm**

Flow was iLL..
diggin these:
"If its not what it seems,then it probably isn't//
you should double check your vision,and see what you been missing//"

Also like that double dribble line..
Dope concepts and ideas..like the style.
thanks for posting.

Posted: **Fri Dec 02, 2011 5:57 pm**

Never had money, never had friends, never was funny, never had rims
always was wrong, never was right, my conscience is gone, never was bright
troubles stay with me, always bad decisions, ppl never miss me, my mind's a cataclysm, never had hope, always mad as shit, took a sad slope, no accident
never had girls, even though i tried, im lookin at the world, trying to survive
in deep debt, trying to get out, takin deep breaths, crying while i shout
smile on my face all im feelin is pain
the thought of losin you has got me goin insane
dont know what to do ive got nowhere to go
i could end it right now and no one would know
but i keep on thinkin somethin dont feel right
should i keep on livin or end it tonight
contemplatin suicide, look at the knife
would i be missed if i ended my life
but i dont do it, i keep pussyin out
but then i get pissed, nothin left to do but shout.

Posted: **Tue Dec 06, 2011 9:35 am**

Nice drop.

You ever heard an angel whisper as you dream of success//
or hear the bells toll,while your thinking of death?//
What if all you ever knew,was just all in your head//
and all those things in your head,took the form of a test?//

If its not what it seems,then it probably isn't//
you should double check your vision,and see what you been missing//

^ This part, I loved..

Second half, didn't do it for me.

Maybe if you would have posted them separately..
It would have made more sense to the reader.
Since they are two completely different writing styles.

Overall, good drop.

<3

Posted: **Wed Dec 07, 2011 12:56 am**

Dream wrote:Nice drop.

Second half, didn't do it for me.
Maybe if you would have posted them separately..
It would have made more sense to the reader.
Since they are two completely different writing styles.

Overall, good drop.

^co-signed.

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