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I've faced death in many ways,but ain't been told that I'm FUCKED//
so Fuck you Fuck ME Fuck this World and this LUCK//
What the Fuck do you WANT,I ain't even started life MAN//
got me out here running the streets,feeling like some sort of HYPE MAN//
I guess I threw the dice and,gambled for real//
give a fuck if this text even holds.... appeal//
I just need to releive this tension I feel in my chest//
throat feeling like when slugs come in contact with vest//
what I feel is UNREST,I guess I'm lost in this PAIN//
got some bad news today,and with that Im ashamed//
Hepatitus,yeah the disease of the streets//
preventable.... ,my stupidity speaks//


Fuck YOU and any one who want to judge this......

Ill critique 2 other post as soon as possible...
http://www.illestlyrics.com/board/my-town-vt24935.html
http://www.illestlyrics.com/board/not-n ... 24854.html

oh ok...i dint get the title or what u were really talking about at first but when i read it and finished...i got it...pretty nice quick read and FUCK YOU TOO DAWG...
srry to hear u got that tho..

Sorry to hear that.

As for the rhyme, it's ok. Nothing to special from a technical aspect. Obviously, a lot of emotion in it's content, though. Definitely worth reading.

I agree completely with Kau. But fuck technicalities. You spat what you felt, and that more than anything really speaks volumes on your character. Keep your head up, bruh.

Damn.

At first, I was put off by all the "Fuck"'s,
But, as I kept reading, it became much more clear.

Short drop,
Full of emotion.
Pain..

Sorry to hear about this,
Always remember. Life goes on.

<3

Ouch, dude.

No doubt.

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