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this is just a snippet of something...not really sure whether or not i want to use the beginning part as the chorus because I don't think it catches enough. Looking for some opinions, because if people aren't feeling it then I probably won't finish it


Girl, better run cause I'm a monster
Like a monster
Girl you falling for a monster ster
Run baby, I'm getting faster
Girl you falling for a monster ster
She tried to turned the lights on, but I found her
And now every single night I surround her
She's afraid to think of anyone but me cause I'm a beast
She knows I tap her phone and I'll be lurking while she sleeps
I'm coming for your heart baby
I'm stifling your breath before I tear it from your chest
Writing on your bathroom wall, baby you don't have to call
I'll be driving by your house tonight

Hmmm...

Wasnt what u was expecting at all. But pretty fresh i gotta say. It took a bit for me to adjust to what u were tryna do. Honestly man, probably more layers would make a big difference on alot of the parts. Since it was all a single take snippet, u cant reallly get the full feel of it. More tracks with some minor panning could bring out the beginning a bunch imo

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This is a 1st for me hearing something like this on illest. Like Loon E I was not expecting this @ all. Overall I give dis a 5 which is not bad was thinking of giving it a 3 but ur on point wit da beat 2 me. Only thing I have a prob wit is dat it could possibly be mixed better vocals need 2 be upped as well. If it wasn't 4 da auto-tune dis prob could've sounded better cuz it really sounds like u could sing wit out da auto-tune.

Now that's a first for me in here...

idk what to say, it was different, thought the lyrics was weak, lyrically not strong, lacking multis metas etc, like it was kool for what it was, but thats about it in my opinion, keep dropping, dont get discouraged. no hate.